The increasingly rapid pace of life today causes more problems than it solves.
Today we have a rapidly changing world. New discoveries, invention happens almost every day. We have reached a point in time that we can’t even predict our way of life five year down the line. We enjoy the comfort of this advancement and feel privilege to have been born in the time. Though it is said the increasingly rapid pace of life today causes more problem than it solves, I don’t agree with the statement.
From the point of waking to going to bed we make extensive use of machines and devices which are made possible due to rapid pace of development. For instance: A typical job holder person when he wakes up drinks coffee from coffee machine, takes car to his office, reaches office floor through elevator and works on computer whole day. It is very hard to imagine our daily routine even without one of above mentioned things. Technological advancement has enabled us to carryout our day to day task with ease, and furthermore, allowing us to focus on larger problems that are needed to be solved. We are freed of burden from thinking about only our basic needs rather we are focused on what problem we will work on today. Activities like cooking, washing, cleaning, driving are getting more automated as time passes and will eventually become standalone machine task. All these things are making our life more perfect than ever before.
People today are healthier. The rapid transformation on the health sector enables people to live longer, happier with increasing medical facilities. Let’s consider a case: After birth of a baby takes place he is provided with vaccination, immunization, proper diet, care etc. He grows up with similar facilities. He has privilege of medicines for illness and hospitals, doctors in case of injury. He is provided with the knowledge about diseases their symptoms, preventive measures that he utilize to take care of himself. This complex health assistance at every step in his life ensures he lives a healthy and longer life. Different techniques like CT-scan, therapies, surgeries, X-ray, Ultrasound, ECG, MRI, Chemotherapy, transplantation of different organs and different test ensures prevention and treatment from different fatal diseases. These have helped us to achieve sound health of people as a whole.
The scenario by which knowledge is imparted and the way how students are taught has completely changed today. Thanks to the today’s robust technological infrastructure that allows a student from remote area to learn from a well known teacher or enroll in a course of a top university. He can access information around the world in few clicks and faster than ever before. Information on various major topics is available on youtube for free and the process has been simplified to the extent that even a kid can use. I can only see benefits with all these and not a single major problem that have been created. Kids today aspire to be vlogger, influencer rather than getting degrees and eventually jobs. People have learnt way to monetize their hobby and live without working for whole life in addition to they are making huge money just by creating content of their own choice. Most people today are happier than ever before and are enjoying their life at fullest.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
furthermore, if, so, well, for instance, in addition
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 22.0 19.5258426966 113% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 6.0 12.4196629213 48% => OK
Conjunction : 17.0 14.8657303371 114% => OK
Relative clauses : 9.0 11.3162921348 80% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 48.0 33.0505617978 145% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 81.0 58.6224719101 138% => OK
Nominalization: 15.0 12.9106741573 116% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2703.0 2235.4752809 121% => OK
No of words: 541.0 442.535393258 122% => OK
Chars per words: 4.99630314233 5.05705443957 99% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.82280071112 4.55969084622 106% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.65082095965 2.79657885939 95% => OK
Unique words: 306.0 215.323595506 142% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.56561922366 0.4932671777 115% => OK
syllable_count: 859.5 704.065955056 122% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.59117977528 101% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 12.0 6.24550561798 192% => OK
Article: 2.0 4.99550561798 40% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 3.10617977528 32% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 1.77640449438 56% => OK
Preposition: 1.0 4.38483146067 23% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 29.0 20.2370786517 143% => OK
Sentence length: 18.0 23.0359550562 78% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 46.8376404828 60.3974514979 78% => OK
Chars per sentence: 93.2068965517 118.986275619 78% => OK
Words per sentence: 18.6551724138 23.4991977007 79% => OK
Discourse Markers: 1.79310344828 5.21951772744 34% => More transition words/phrases wanted.
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.97078651685 80% => OK
Language errors: 4.0 7.80617977528 51% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 16.0 10.2758426966 156% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 4.0 5.13820224719 78% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 9.0 4.83258426966 186% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.250037507546 0.243740707755 103% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0660029422514 0.0831039109588 79% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.107760849121 0.0758088955206 142% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.160251295262 0.150359130593 107% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0868958501465 0.0667264976115 130% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 11.5 14.1392134831 81% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 53.21 48.8420337079 109% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 7.92365168539 39% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 10.3 12.1743820225 85% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.72 12.1639044944 96% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.79 8.38706741573 105% => OK
difficult_words: 146.0 100.480337079 145% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 8.0 11.8971910112 67% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.2 11.2143820225 82% => OK
text_standard: 12.0 11.7820224719 102% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5/6 paragraphs with 3/4 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: reason 4. address both of the views presented for reason 4 (optional)
para 6: conclusion.
Rates: 58.33 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 3.5 Out of 6
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