It is more harmful to compromise one s own beliefs than to adhere to them Write a response in which you discuss the extent to which you agree or disagree with the statement and explain your reasoning for the position you take In developing and supporting

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It is more harmful to compromise one's own beliefs than to adhere to them.
Write a response in which you discuss the extent to which you agree or disagree with the statement and explain your reasoning for the position you take. In developing and supporting your position, you should consider ways in which the statement might or might not hold true and explain how these considerations shape your position.

It is said that it is more detrimental for people to ignore their beliefs and compromise with others’ opinions. I agree with this point of view to some extent.
On the one hand, I can explain why compromising with the ideas of others can be harmful. Generally, compromising means that some individuals in conversation with their counterparts ignore some parts of their beliefs despite their inner desire. In some circumstances, this condition can hurt people because after a while they lose their confidence, self-esteem and self-reliance. For example, one employee may be forced to compromise with some of the opinions of his boss while he knows that his boss is wrong. However, for having job security he decides to avoid adhering to his beliefs and change his mind for the sake of his boss. This condition can break the confidence of the employees, as most of the time managers abuse this situation to insult their workforce to have more power in their office to impose their irrational rules. I claim that compromising with incorrect ideas is wrong and shows the weakness of individuals, and people have to try to adhere to ideas that they think are fair and right because most of the time compromising can be counterproductive and make the situation worse.

However, all the time people do not have a good idea, and it is necessary for them to compromise or accept others' innovative or creative ideas if they want to progress in their lives. For example, when Galileo expressed that the earth is round, that time many people tried to adhere to their beliefs because of some irrational prejudices and rejected Galileo’s argument. Sometimes, adhering to some specific and obsolete ideas is not good because they can curtail people’s thoughts. As a result, people should try to be broad-minded and flexible enough to accept innovation and creativity in different fields. In modern life, people have an easier life in different contexts, such as communication, just because they have tried to keep up with the time and creative ideas of some entrepreneurs, namely Bill Gates and Mark Zuckerberg in the realm of technology.

In conclusion, in my view, people must protect their confidence and personality by adhering to their ideas as long as they are right, and change them in the correct way when it is necessary.

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Grammar and spelling errors:
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
however, if, may, so, while, for example, in conclusion, such as, as a result, in my view

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 14.0 19.5258426966 72% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 9.0 12.4196629213 72% => OK
Conjunction : 18.0 14.8657303371 121% => OK
Relative clauses : 9.0 11.3162921348 80% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 46.0 33.0505617978 139% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 57.0 58.6224719101 97% => OK
Nominalization: 12.0 12.9106741573 93% => OK

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1944.0 2235.4752809 87% => OK
No of words: 389.0 442.535393258 88% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.99742930591 5.05705443957 99% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.44106776838 4.55969084622 97% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.86922398161 2.79657885939 103% => OK
Unique words: 184.0 215.323595506 85% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.473007712082 0.4932671777 96% => OK
syllable_count: 608.4 704.065955056 86% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.59117977528 101% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 7.0 6.24550561798 112% => OK
Article: 0.0 4.99550561798 0% => OK
Subordination: 3.0 3.10617977528 97% => OK
Conjunction: 3.0 1.77640449438 169% => OK
Preposition: 5.0 4.38483146067 114% => OK

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 15.0 20.2370786517 74% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 25.0 23.0359550562 109% => OK
Sentence length SD: 57.0739870694 60.3974514979 94% => OK
Chars per sentence: 129.6 118.986275619 109% => OK
Words per sentence: 25.9333333333 23.4991977007 110% => OK
Discourse Markers: 5.93333333333 5.21951772744 114% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.97078651685 80% => OK
Language errors: 2.0 7.80617977528 26% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 7.0 10.2758426966 68% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 8.0 5.13820224719 156% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 0.0 4.83258426966 0% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.112226451181 0.243740707755 46% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0528622126951 0.0831039109588 64% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0388188997291 0.0758088955206 51% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.089595798729 0.150359130593 60% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0533943862023 0.0667264976115 80% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 15.1 14.1392134831 107% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 46.1 48.8420337079 94% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.92365168539 111% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 13.0 12.1743820225 107% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.02 12.1639044944 99% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.04 8.38706741573 96% => OK
difficult_words: 78.0 100.480337079 78% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 8.5 11.8971910112 71% => OK
gunning_fog: 12.0 11.2143820225 107% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 11.7820224719 76% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Better to have 5/6 paragraphs with 3/4 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:

para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: reason 4. address both of the views presented for reason 4 (optional)
para 6: conclusion.


Rates: 50.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 3.0 Out of 6
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