Men and women, because of their inherit physical differences, are not equally suited for many tasks.
For most of human history, women have been regarded as the 'weaker' gender and thus their roles were confined to those such as childcare and housework. In recent centuries, the feminism movement has argued against these societal constraints, especially since the end of two world wars, during which time many women were forced to work the manufacturing and agricultural jobs of their husbands as well as take care of the households while their men left for battle. Women have since then shown that they are capable of much more than only taking care of household duties, and in many sectors today we see men and women taking up almost equal percentage of jobs. While time and these progressive movements certainly show that women are capable of doing more than a largely patriachal society has allowed them to, the biological makeup of both genders naturally constrain women in certain roles. In other words, men are still capable of a few tasks that most women would physically not be able to accomplish.
One area where we can see the obvious physical differences between genders are sports competitions for the Olympics. It is a given that standards for mens versus womens athletic prowesses differ. For example, take figure skating. Athletes such as Yuzuru Hanyu have continued to challenge and set a benchmark for men's skating, with his quadruple lux's being one of his signature moves. This move almost defies the laws of physics and motion, and is an extreme example of what the human body can accomplish under intense training. Following in his footsteps, skaters have struggled to obtain this high level of perfection in order to compete at the same events. Now let's look at women's skating. It's obvious when looking at performances between the to genders, even a common spectator can see that most women skaters do not have the strength in their muscles to perform a quadruple lux, much less perform it with as much grace and elegance as Yuzuru. Thus, skating competitions such as the Olympics have a lower standard and do not expect women athletes to be able to carry out these tasks.
Another less extreme example would be in the field of construction work. For certain tasks, it is more reasonable for men with bodies made up of a higher muscle percentage to be hired to work on contruction sites. It's not to say that women cannot do this work, but it would be more efficient, both saving money and time, for a company to hire less men who can carry heavier loads for a long period of time, than a larger group of women who may need to take some breaks in between jobs. Other jobs that require much physical strength (such as furniture movers) are also mostly done by groups of men.
The above examples show that although women have strived to show that they are just as strong and capable as men, there are still physical limitations to what their body can allow them to accomplish. Although we can see today that a majority of tasks are capable of being done by both men and women, there are still a small number of jobs women would not likely be hired for simply because they are not physically strong enough.
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 5, column 215, Rule ID: IT_IS[6]
Message: Did you mean 'it's' (='it is') instead of 'its' (possessive pronoun)?
Suggestion: It's; It is
... be hired to work on contruction sites. Its not to say that women cannot do this wo...
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Line 5, column 344, Rule ID: FEWER_LESS[2]
Message: Did you mean 'fewer'? The noun men is countable.
Suggestion: fewer
...g money and time, for a company to hire less men who can carry heavier loads for a l...
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Line 5, column 392, Rule ID: PERIOD_OF_TIME[1]
Message: Use simply 'period'.
Suggestion: period
... who can carry heavier loads for a long period of time, than a larger group of women who may n...
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Line 7, column 317, Rule ID: SMALL_NUMBER_OF[1]
Message: Specify a number, remove phrase, use 'a few', or use 'some'
Suggestion: a few; some
... by both men and women, there are still a small number of jobs women would not likely be hired fo...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, if, look, may, so, still, then, thus, well, while, for example, such as, as well as, in other words
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 24.0 19.5258426966 123% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 13.0 12.4196629213 105% => OK
Conjunction : 15.0 14.8657303371 101% => OK
Relative clauses : 15.0 11.3162921348 133% => OK
Pronoun: 39.0 33.0505617978 118% => OK
Preposition: 71.0 58.6224719101 121% => OK
Nominalization: 5.0 12.9106741573 39% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2586.0 2235.4752809 116% => OK
No of words: 545.0 442.535393258 123% => OK
Chars per words: 4.74495412844 5.05705443957 94% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.83169070408 4.55969084622 106% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.41556409976 2.79657885939 86% => OK
Unique words: 270.0 215.323595506 125% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.495412844037 0.4932671777 100% => OK
syllable_count: 810.0 704.065955056 115% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.59117977528 94% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 5.0 6.24550561798 80% => OK
Article: 3.0 4.99550561798 60% => OK
Subordination: 3.0 3.10617977528 97% => OK
Conjunction: 3.0 1.77640449438 169% => OK
Preposition: 4.0 4.38483146067 91% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 20.0 20.2370786517 99% => OK
Sentence length: 27.0 23.0359550562 117% => OK
Sentence length SD: 74.8540413071 60.3974514979 124% => OK
Chars per sentence: 129.3 118.986275619 109% => OK
Words per sentence: 27.25 23.4991977007 116% => OK
Discourse Markers: 5.5 5.21951772744 105% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.97078651685 80% => OK
Language errors: 4.0 7.80617977528 51% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 12.0 10.2758426966 117% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 3.0 5.13820224719 58% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 5.0 4.83258426966 103% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.319551505658 0.243740707755 131% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.100734136993 0.0831039109588 121% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0659699735295 0.0758088955206 87% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.202486846853 0.150359130593 135% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0460298471717 0.0667264976115 69% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 14.5 14.1392134831 103% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 52.53 48.8420337079 108% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 7.92365168539 39% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 12.6 12.1743820225 103% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 10.51 12.1639044944 86% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.54 8.38706741573 102% => OK
difficult_words: 123.0 100.480337079 122% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 18.0 11.8971910112 151% => OK
gunning_fog: 12.8 11.2143820225 114% => OK
text_standard: 13.0 11.7820224719 110% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5/6 paragraphs with 3/4 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: reason 4. address both of the views presented for reason 4 (optional)
para 6: conclusion.
Rates: 66.67 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 4.0 Out of 6
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