A nation should require all of its students to study the same national curriculum until they enter college. Write a response in which you discuss the extent to which you agree or disagree with the recommendation and explain your reasoning for the position you take. In developing and supporting your position, describe specific circumstances in which adopting the recommendation would or would not be advantageous and explain how these examples shape your position.
The speaker asserts that the nation should require all the students to study the same national curriculum before entering college. Same curriculum is adverse to some students who have learning disability. However they are only minority in the country; In my point of view, the nation is responsible for maintaining country development and training experts; So, the nation has to require students to study the same national curriculum until entering college. First of all, ordering students to study the same curriculum has a positive effect on the country. Second, requiring students to learn the same curriculum is practical; Therefore, I totally agree with the speaker.
To begin with, requiring students to study the same national curriculum until they enter college helps governments accomplish their social obligations. The nation has to maintain continuous development and train enough experts. In many countries, there are many reforms in the education to ensure every student can get much education in order to develop experts to facilitate country in the future. Such a reform is to require all students to study the same courses that all students can get a fair condition of education. In a word, nations have the responsibility of requiring students to study the same national curriculum before they enter college.
Further, Students will also benefit from such policy. Since these methods improve students’ will of learning, students will increase the probability of success. For example, in Taiwan, students are studying some curriculum until entering the university. With a fair competition, students will focus on studying, fulfilling them to facilitate occupational development in the future. In other words, these tests are increasing the students’ will to study. In sum, requiring students to study the same national class have a positive influence on students.
Finally, the things that nation require all students to study the same curriculum is feasible. Nation has enough resources to research and develop a series of the national curriculum; At the same time, this method can save more money, and all revision is convenient because only the relevant sector plans this curriculum. For instance, in Taiwan, because only the ministry of education manages education information, including admission requirement tests, and arranges curriculum, the admission test can hold on schedule constantly. In brief, when the government wants to apply such a policy, it is feasible to require all students to learn the same curriculum before entering the university.
To sum up, for developing the country and training experts for the country, the nation should require all students to learn the same curriculum before entering college; This method will benefit the country. Then, it is feasible to require students to study the same curriculum; Thus, I strongly agree with what the speaker says.
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 206, Rule ID: SENT_START_CONJUNCTIVE_LINKING_ADVERB_COMMA[1]
Message: Did you forget a comma after a conjunctive/linking adverb?
Suggestion: However,
... students who have learning disability. However they are only minority in the country; ...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, finally, first, however, second, so, then, therefore, thus, as to, for example, for instance, in brief, first of all, in other words, to begin with, to sum up
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 12.0 19.5258426966 61% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 12.0 12.4196629213 97% => OK
Conjunction : 6.0 14.8657303371 40% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 5.0 11.3162921348 44% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 18.0 33.0505617978 54% => OK
Preposition: 67.0 58.6224719101 114% => OK
Nominalization: 15.0 12.9106741573 116% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2470.0 2235.4752809 110% => OK
No of words: 452.0 442.535393258 102% => OK
Chars per words: 5.46460176991 5.05705443957 108% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.61088837703 4.55969084622 101% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.82311981362 2.79657885939 101% => OK
Unique words: 191.0 215.323595506 89% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.422566371681 0.4932671777 86% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 782.1 704.065955056 111% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.7 1.59117977528 107% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 7.0 6.24550561798 112% => OK
Article: 7.0 4.99550561798 140% => OK
Subordination: 3.0 3.10617977528 97% => OK
Conjunction: 2.0 1.77640449438 113% => OK
Preposition: 13.0 4.38483146067 296% => Less preposition wanted as sentence beginnings.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 22.0 20.2370786517 109% => OK
Sentence length: 20.0 23.0359550562 87% => OK
Sentence length SD: 52.3345879024 60.3974514979 87% => OK
Chars per sentence: 112.272727273 118.986275619 94% => OK
Words per sentence: 20.5454545455 23.4991977007 87% => OK
Discourse Markers: 7.45454545455 5.21951772744 143% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.97078651685 101% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 7.80617977528 13% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 13.0 10.2758426966 127% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 1.0 5.13820224719 19% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 8.0 4.83258426966 166% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.393521888962 0.243740707755 161% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.162839664529 0.0831039109588 196% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.104476854169 0.0758088955206 138% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.27840493368 0.150359130593 185% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0757960062691 0.0667264976115 114% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 14.6 14.1392134831 103% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 42.72 48.8420337079 87% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.92365168539 111% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 12.3 12.1743820225 101% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 14.39 12.1639044944 118% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.33 8.38706741573 99% => OK
difficult_words: 106.0 100.480337079 105% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 12.0 11.8971910112 101% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.0 11.2143820225 89% => OK
text_standard: 15.0 11.7820224719 127% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 62.5 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 3.75 Out of 6
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