A nation should require all of its students to study the same national curriculum until they enter college
Unity or diversity in national curriculum studied by students is one of the most controversial national topics in the world right now. Some section advocates for diversity in the national curriculum taught to students, others on the contrary, advocates for uniformity in the national curriculum. The prompt maintains that there should be unity in the national curriculum of a nation until they enter college. I mostly agree with this suggestion and argues that there should be some level of unity in the national curriclum of students until they enter college for two reasons.
In the first place, most students prior to college are undecided and does not know which career path they would want to embark on. It is prudent that those students are taught the same thing until they become mature and can make decisions independently without any help from external sources. For instance, a study conducted by Education Statistics Center in 2007 showed that over 70% of students prior to college do not know what career path they would want to take. They do not know whether they would want to offer Engineering,Accountancy,Medicine,Arts among others. With this, it is to the nation's greater good and for that matter the students, that they are taught the same thing before they role into college. Imagine being taught the syllabus of Accountancy, and the students enter college and want to offer Engineering? This would be a total disaster on the part of the students because they would face a dilemma either to choose different career paths which they have no interest in or they go back to college to be re-taught the syllabus of the carrer paths they want to thread on.
Again, students who are taught 'everything' before going to college are more well-rounded than students who are only taught their career syllabus. For instance, if a student wants to pursue Accountancy and he is taught a some aspects of Humanities, Arts among others. Such student is more likely to be all-rounded and can suit into other facets of life in which they find themselves. Studies show that employers love graduates who are capable of handling more than one tasks. For example, if a student graduates with Engineering background and he was also taught a little bit of Accounting syllabus and he is employed and it happens there is a vacancy in the Accounting position in the entity he or she is employed, because he or she has some knowledge , the company would rely on him or her to fill in that postion thereby saving the organization some dollars that can be used to accomplish other pressing needs of the company.
In conclusion, although , others also claim that those students that are only thought their career-path courses are more likely to be determined and focused in life, what about the 70% of students that are undecided as suggested by the research above, will they have to change their career-paths or will they go back to college to be re-taught their career-paths?
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, first, if, so, well, for example, for instance, in conclusion, on the contrary, in the first place
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 28.0 19.5258426966 143% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 13.0 12.4196629213 105% => OK
Conjunction : 18.0 14.8657303371 121% => OK
Relative clauses : 18.0 11.3162921348 159% => OK
Pronoun: 51.0 33.0505617978 154% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 75.0 58.6224719101 128% => OK
Nominalization: 8.0 12.9106741573 62% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2463.0 2235.4752809 110% => OK
No of words: 501.0 442.535393258 113% => OK
Chars per words: 4.91616766467 5.05705443957 97% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.73107062784 4.55969084622 104% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.95940463602 2.79657885939 106% => OK
Unique words: 224.0 215.323595506 104% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.447105788423 0.4932671777 91% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 762.3 704.065955056 108% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.59117977528 94% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 6.0 6.24550561798 96% => OK
Article: 3.0 4.99550561798 60% => OK
Subordination: 3.0 3.10617977528 97% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 1.77640449438 56% => OK
Preposition: 3.0 4.38483146067 68% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 17.0 20.2370786517 84% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 29.0 23.0359550562 126% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 95.208094797 60.3974514979 158% => OK
Chars per sentence: 144.882352941 118.986275619 122% => OK
Words per sentence: 29.4705882353 23.4991977007 125% => OK
Discourse Markers: 6.11764705882 5.21951772744 117% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.97078651685 80% => OK
Language errors: 10.0 7.80617977528 128% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 8.0 10.2758426966 78% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 4.0 5.13820224719 78% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 5.0 4.83258426966 103% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.347197185424 0.243740707755 142% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.140173719388 0.0831039109588 169% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.104422794679 0.0758088955206 138% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.219447806454 0.150359130593 146% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.155505770693 0.0667264976115 233% => More connections among paragraphs wanted.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 16.5 14.1392134831 117% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 50.5 48.8420337079 103% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.92365168539 111% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 13.4 12.1743820225 110% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.85 12.1639044944 97% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.2 8.38706741573 98% => OK
difficult_words: 99.0 100.480337079 99% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 12.0 11.8971910112 101% => OK
gunning_fog: 13.6 11.2143820225 121% => OK
text_standard: 12.0 11.7820224719 102% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5/6 paragraphs with 3/4 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: reason 4. address both of the views presented for reason 4 (optional)
para 6: conclusion.
Rates: 50.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 3.0 Out of 6
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