No field of study can advance significantly unless it incorporates knowledge and experience from outside that field.
''The only good is knowledge and the only evil is ignorance''- Socrates. We, human-beings are advancing meteorically through the passage of time primarily because of education/knowledge. The prompt states that a certain area of knowledge or study burgeons prominently if it assimilates knowledge and experience from other other areas. I mostly agree with this opinion for several reasons.
To begin with, we can think of a certain area of study such as physics. If we look back into history, it is evident that at first the realm of scientific knowledge came from philosophy. The first philosophical knowledge dated back to the times of Greece around 500-400 B.C. . The pantheons of that time were Archimedes, Socrates, Plato, Pythagoras and many more. They were the ones who shaped the early stage of knowledge. In that time there were no division between physics, mathematics, astronomy, or chemistry. They were all thought to be one such field with many interlinks between them. As knowledge of these fields flourished, these individuals fields became so much with immense amount of information that they had to be divided into the fields that we now know of. Even, in 15th-16th century these fields were together. If we delve more onto physics, it divulges that physics is heavily incorporated with mathematics. Without mathematics, most of the theories in physics do not have any scientific proof or empirical stability. As, everyone knows Albert Einstein's theory of Relativity, he came up with the theory in 1907, but took him around eight years to mathematically prove his theory. And finally in 1915, he published the general theory of relativity which was a iconoclastic to our beliefs, and helped us to understand how the universe works. As it stands, without mathematics, physics is merely some ideas. So it needs other area of study to advance.
Additionally, we should look into more on some other fields of knowledge, such as engineering subjects. As, we are becoming more and more industrialized and every nation are going through changes in their infrastructures; Engineering as a field of study is becoming more lucrative. These engineering subjects not only rely on physics but also in other fundamental subjects which are mathematics, chemistry, statistics and etc. Without incorporating all of them into a specialized field such as mechanical engineering or electrical engineering, these subjects would not have existed. There are many more eclectic fields are becoming vital in our society, and all of them are mostly an assimilated version of other areas. If we look into Bio-genetics engineering, this field of study is responsible for the the inventions of the vaccines for new diseases. As world is going through a pandemic caused by COVID-19 virus. We are relying on to the people of genetics engineering to invent a working vaccine against the virus, which is yet to be discovered. This very field is a mixture of nano-tech engineering, biology, genetics, and microbiology. It is more than evident that incorporation of other fields is a necessity.
In conclusion, a field of study should incorporate with other fields of study. As, with everything, there is some drawbacks. If we rely only on other fields heavily in some areas, then the original field may give anomalies. For example, if we rely only on mathematics, then they may predict that certain star or galaxies formation in a particular way which gives off discrepant results when we look through our telescopes and see different results. As such, there are difficulties when relying heavily on other areas.
Grammar and spelling errors:
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Suggestion: other
...similates knowledge and experience from other other areas. I mostly agree with this opinion...
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... the times of Greece around 500-400 B.C. . The pantheons of that time were Archime...
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...tions of the vaccines for new diseases. As world is going through a pandemic cause...
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...r fields of study. As, with everything, there is some drawbacks. If we rely only on other fields heavil...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, finally, first, if, look, may, so, then, for example, in conclusion, such as, to begin with
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 31.0 19.5258426966 159% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 6.0 12.4196629213 48% => OK
Conjunction : 19.0 14.8657303371 128% => OK
Relative clauses : 16.0 11.3162921348 141% => OK
Pronoun: 51.0 33.0505617978 154% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 89.0 58.6224719101 152% => OK
Nominalization: 7.0 12.9106741573 54% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 3019.0 2235.4752809 135% => OK
No of words: 582.0 442.535393258 132% => OK
Chars per words: 5.18728522337 5.05705443957 103% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.91168771031 4.55969084622 108% => OK
Word Length SD: 3.05975546576 2.79657885939 109% => OK
Unique words: 280.0 215.323595506 130% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.481099656357 0.4932671777 98% => OK
syllable_count: 959.4 704.065955056 136% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.59117977528 101% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 17.0 6.24550561798 272% => Less pronouns wanted as sentence beginning.
Article: 5.0 4.99550561798 100% => OK
Subordination: 9.0 3.10617977528 290% => Less adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 6.0 1.77640449438 338% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 8.0 4.38483146067 182% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 34.0 20.2370786517 168% => OK
Sentence length: 17.0 23.0359550562 74% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 43.8742797336 60.3974514979 73% => OK
Chars per sentence: 88.7941176471 118.986275619 75% => OK
Words per sentence: 17.1176470588 23.4991977007 73% => OK
Discourse Markers: 3.0 5.21951772744 57% => More transition words/phrases wanted.
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.97078651685 80% => OK
Language errors: 9.0 7.80617977528 115% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 7.0 10.2758426966 68% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 3.0 5.13820224719 58% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 24.0 4.83258426966 497% => Less facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.24742236341 0.243740707755 102% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0634922552823 0.0831039109588 76% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0711315463439 0.0758088955206 94% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.153839067741 0.150359130593 102% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.00921296524807 0.0667264976115 14% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 11.6 14.1392134831 82% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 54.22 48.8420337079 111% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.92365168539 111% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.9 12.1743820225 81% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.53 12.1639044944 103% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.31 8.38706741573 99% => OK
difficult_words: 141.0 100.480337079 140% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 7.0 11.8971910112 59% => Linsear_write_formula is low.
gunning_fog: 8.8 11.2143820225 78% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 11.7820224719 76% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5/6 paragraphs with 3/4 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: reason 4. address both of the views presented for reason 4 (optional)
para 6: conclusion.
Rates: 50.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 3.0 Out of 6
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