As people rely more and more on technology to solve problems, the ability of humans to think for themselves will surely deteriorate.
With the advancements in technology, human lives have become easier. Previously, the process of knitting a fabric used to take days of human effort to complete, is now automated on a machine and completes in just a few hours. The reduction of human labor and involvement in these processes have raised concerns over the impact of this on the human minds. Human beings are a creature of habit and it would seem that with the increase in dependence on technology to solve our problems, we would be unable to solve them on our own.
Although the stated point seems to be correct, it fails to take into account the opportunities and responsibilties technology brings in with it. For instance, SpaceX has reduced the cost and increased the safety of space travel by making reusable rockets a reality, which has resulted into cheaper and more frequent visits to the space. This has benefitted communication with easier and quick deployment of satellites, the field of research by deployment of multiple telescopes in space and also contributed in the efforts to make humans an interplanetary speices. Thus, SpaceX has made available the resources and opprtunities to people which previously were a bigger concern due to its cost. This has in no way removed the need of human mind, but rather has reduced its burden and helped it to focus on the main end goals.
Another example analogous to the previous one would be that of a computer. Given the complex calculations required in scientific research, scientists can automate them on a computer, which would not only complete it efficiently but also accurately, and they can focus on studying the results and confirm if a theory is correct or not.
In summary, technology helps humans to make things happen. It can provide tools, but ultimately it is us humans who have to use them to get things done. As technology advances it brings in a new scope of human involvement, challenging them in newer ways which were never imagined.
Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, if, so, thus, for instance, in summary
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 9.0 19.5258426966 46% => More to be verbs wanted.
Auxiliary verbs: 8.0 12.4196629213 64% => OK
Conjunction : 16.0 14.8657303371 108% => OK
Relative clauses : 7.0 11.3162921348 62% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 25.0 33.0505617978 76% => OK
Preposition: 55.0 58.6224719101 94% => OK
Nominalization: 8.0 12.9106741573 62% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1643.0 2235.4752809 73% => OK
No of words: 335.0 442.535393258 76% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.90447761194 5.05705443957 97% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.27820116611 4.55969084622 94% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.83855327908 2.79657885939 102% => OK
Unique words: 192.0 215.323595506 89% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.573134328358 0.4932671777 116% => OK
syllable_count: 522.9 704.065955056 74% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.59117977528 101% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 5.0 6.24550561798 80% => OK
Article: 3.0 4.99550561798 60% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 3.10617977528 64% => OK
Conjunction: 3.0 1.77640449438 169% => OK
Preposition: 2.0 4.38483146067 46% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 14.0 20.2370786517 69% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 23.0 23.0359550562 100% => OK
Sentence length SD: 56.5185539339 60.3974514979 94% => OK
Chars per sentence: 117.357142857 118.986275619 99% => OK
Words per sentence: 23.9285714286 23.4991977007 102% => OK
Discourse Markers: 3.5 5.21951772744 67% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.97078651685 80% => OK
Language errors: 0.0 7.80617977528 0% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 7.0 10.2758426966 68% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 2.0 5.13820224719 39% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 5.0 4.83258426966 103% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.13987924387 0.243740707755 57% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0468621637938 0.0831039109588 56% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.031896297878 0.0758088955206 42% => Sentences are similar to each other.
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0762783163947 0.150359130593 51% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0449587464699 0.0667264976115 67% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 13.6 14.1392134831 96% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 48.13 48.8420337079 99% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.92365168539 111% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 12.3 12.1743820225 101% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.44 12.1639044944 94% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 9.26 8.38706741573 110% => OK
difficult_words: 95.0 100.480337079 95% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 11.0 11.8971910112 92% => OK
gunning_fog: 11.2 11.2143820225 100% => OK
text_standard: 11.0 11.7820224719 93% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5/6 paragraphs with 3/4 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: reason 4. address both of the views presented for reason 4 (optional)
para 6: conclusion.
Rates: 50.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 3.0 Out of 6
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Note: the e-grader does NOT examine the meaning of words and ideas. VIP users will receive further evaluations by advanced module of e-grader and human graders.