A movie producer sent the following memo to the head of the movie studio.
“We need to increase the funding for the movie Working Title by 10% in order to ensure a quality product. As you know, we are working with a first-time director, whose only previous experience has been shooting commercials for a shampoo company. Since the advertising business is notoriously wasteful, it stands to reason that our director will expect to be able to shoot take after take, without concern for how much time is being spent on any one scene. In addition, while we have saved money by hiring relatively inexperienced assistant producers and directors, this savings in salary will undoubtedly translate to greater expenditures in paying the actors and unionized crew overtime for the extra hours they will spend on the set waiting for the assistant directors and producers to arrange things. If we don’t get this extra money, the movie is virtually assured to be a failure.”
The argument concludes that increasing the budget for filming the movie will make the movie successful. The conclusion is merely based on the director's incapability to shoot due to lack of experience. The memo claims that the money saved by hiring an inexperienced director would result in greater expenses as they would have to pay for the overtime hours to the actors and the unionised crew.This memo fails to comprehend that the experience in advertisement could also be useful as well as that the director could be skilled enough to make the movie successful in one go .In addition, there could be several reasons which might result into paying for overtime hours.
First of all, the producer assumes that lack of experience of the directors and producers in the movie industry would result to greater expenditure as they would have to pay for the overtime hours to the actors and unionized crew. But this might not be the case. There are several reasons such as extra training that they would have received, a fresher perspective on how to make the shoot more efficient. They could implement ways to set up the scene before the arrival of the crew and actors such that they save time and cost. There might be scenarios where there is ready made sets and they just must directly shoot. There is a high possibility that the actors and the crew aren’t ready for the shoot yet, but the set is ready. Since he memo hasn’t ruled out these factors, one can not conclude there would be greater expense by paying overtime hours to the actors and the unionized crew.
Secondly, the memo assumes that the director’s experience in the advertisement field is waste and does not count. What if the director has undergone immense amount of training and has worked closely with famous directors? The advertisement and the movie industry might have some similarities which made him choose to work in this field. Moreover, the director could have done internships at other firms or worked part-time but might have not mentioned about it. The director might have great references and great reviews in this field from his other employers which could clearly weaken the movie producer’s argument.
However, the producer has not provided with any proofs or case studies which agrees with the arguments he has provided. One cannot draw any firm conclusions about director’s inexperience resulting into additional costs. They should look into any surveys or statistics of other movie industries if this has ever been a case. It is hard to believe with what the producer has to say as the recent case of Yamaha movie production firm stated otherwise. They had also hired a first-time director and they hit the box office record at one go. The producer could have used a different approach such as introducing a one week training program to train the freshers how the company policy works. Therefore, to conclude there could be other reasons responsible for the increase in the expenses.
Comments
e-rater score report
Attribute Value Ideal
Final score: 3.5 out of 6
Category: Satisfactory Excellent
No. of Grammatical Errors: 9 2
No. of Spelling Errors: 6 2
No. of Sentences: 22 15
No. of Words: 506 350
No. of Characters: 2427 1500
No. of Different Words: 226 200
Fourth Root of Number of Words: 4.743 4.7
Average Word Length: 4.796 4.6
Word Length SD: 2.505 2.4
No. of Words greater than 5 chars: 146 100
No. of Words greater than 6 chars: 113 80
No. of Words greater than 7 chars: 87 40
No. of Words greater than 8 chars: 52 20
Use of Passive Voice (%): 0 0
Avg. Sentence Length: 23 21.0
Sentence Length SD: 14.158 7.5
Use of Discourse Markers (%): 0.591 0.12
Sentence-Text Coherence: 0.298 0.35
Sentence-Para Coherence: 0.298 0.50
Sentence-Sentence Coherence: 0.108 0.07
Number of Paragraphs: 1 5
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 143, Rule ID: POSSESIVE_APOSTROPHE[1]
Message: Possible typo: apostrophe is missing. Did you mean 'directors'' or 'director's'?
Suggestion: directors'; director's
.... The conclusion is merely based on the directors incapability to shoot due to lack of ex...
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Line 1, column 202, Rule ID: ENGLISH_WORD_REPEAT_BEGINNING_RULE
Message: Three successive sentences begin with the same word. Reword the sentence or use a thesaurus to find a synonym.
...ity to shoot due to lack of experience. The memo claims that the money saved by hir...
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Line 1, column 394, Rule ID: SENTENCE_WHITESPACE
Message: Add a space between sentences
Suggestion: This
...rs to the actors and the unionised crew.This memo fails to comprehend that the exper...
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Line 1, column 573, Rule ID: COMMA_PARENTHESIS_WHITESPACE
Message: Don't put a space before the full stop
Suggestion: .
...h to make the movie successful in one go .In addition, there could be several reas...
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Line 1, column 575, Rule ID: SENTENCE_WHITESPACE
Message: Add a space between sentences
Suggestion: In
...to make the movie successful in one go .In addition, there could be several reason...
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Line 2, column 731, Rule ID: HE_THE[1]
Message: Did you mean 'Since the memo'?
Suggestion: Since the memo
...or the shoot yet, but the set is ready. Since he memo hasn’t ruled out these factors, one can...
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Line 4, column 89, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...proofs or case studies which agrees with the arguments he has provided. One canno...
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Line 4, column 257, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...ts. They should look into any surveys or statistics of other movie industries if ...
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Line 4, column 400, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...e producer has to say as the recent case of Yamaha movie production firm stated o...
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Line 4, column 461, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...duction firm stated otherwise. They had also hired a first-time director and the...
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Line 4, column 677, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...am to train the freshers how the company policy works. Therefore, to conclude the...
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Line 4, column 760, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...e could be other reasons responsible for the increase in the expenses.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, first, however, if, look, moreover, second, secondly, so, therefore, well, as to, in addition, such as, as well as, first of all, as well as that
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 15.0 19.6327345309 76% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 25.0 12.9520958084 193% => OK
Conjunction : 20.0 11.1786427146 179% => OK
Relative clauses : 14.0 13.6137724551 103% => OK
Pronoun: 30.0 28.8173652695 104% => OK
Preposition: 54.0 55.5748502994 97% => OK
Nominalization: 13.0 16.3942115768 79% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2481.0 2260.96107784 110% => OK
No of words: 503.0 441.139720559 114% => OK
Chars per words: 4.9324055666 5.12650576532 96% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.73578520332 4.56307096286 104% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.58076348122 2.78398813304 93% => OK
Unique words: 232.0 204.123752495 114% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.461232604374 0.468620217663 98% => OK
syllable_count: 773.1 705.55239521 110% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.59920159681 94% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 5.0 4.96107784431 101% => OK
Article: 11.0 8.76447105788 126% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 2.70958083832 37% => OK
Conjunction: 2.0 1.67365269461 119% => OK
Preposition: 3.0 4.22255489022 71% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 22.0 19.7664670659 111% => OK
Sentence length: 22.0 22.8473053892 96% => OK
Sentence length SD: 81.0665984758 57.8364921388 140% => OK
Chars per sentence: 112.772727273 119.503703932 94% => OK
Words per sentence: 22.8636363636 23.324526521 98% => OK
Discourse Markers: 7.09090909091 5.70786347227 124% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 5.15768463074 78% => More paragraphs wanted.
Language errors: 12.0 5.25449101796 228% => Less language errors wanted.
Sentences with positive sentiment : 9.0 8.20758483034 110% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 5.0 6.88822355289 73% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 8.0 4.67664670659 171% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.190612444637 0.218282227539 87% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0638337428672 0.0743258471296 86% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.054043527316 0.0701772020484 77% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.131719866635 0.128457276422 103% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0386901817154 0.0628817314937 62% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 13.2 14.3799401198 92% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 57.61 48.3550499002 119% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 7.1628742515 43% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 10.7 12.197005988 88% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.61 12.5979740519 92% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.9 8.32208582834 95% => OK
difficult_words: 101.0 98.500998004 103% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 18.0 12.3882235529 145% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.8 11.1389221557 97% => OK
text_standard: 11.0 11.9071856287 92% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 58.33 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 3.5 Out of 6
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