A movie producer sent the following memo to the head of the movie studio We need to increase the funding for the movie Working Title by 10 in order to ensure a quality product As you know we are working with a first time director whose only previous exper | TOEFL IELTS GMAT GRE SAT ACT PTE ESL

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A movie producer sent the following memo to the head of the movie studio.

“We need to increase the funding for the movie Working Title by 10% in order to ensure a quality product. As you know, we are working with a first-time director, whose only previous experience has been shooting commercials for a shampoo company. Since the advertising business is notoriously wasteful, it stands to reason that our director will expect to be able to shoot take after take, without concern for how much time is being spent on any one scene. In addition, while we have saved money by hiring relatively inexperienced assistant producers and directors, this savings in salary will undoubtedly translate to greater expenditures in paying the actors and unionized crew overtime for the extra hours they will spend on the set waiting for the assistant directors and producers to arrange things. If we don’t get this extra money, the movie is virtually assured to be a failure.”

In a recent memo to the head of the movie studio, movie producer concludes that extra money is required in order to produce quality product, otherwise, the movie will be a failure. However, the conclusion might hold water, it relies in several unfounded assumptions that, if not substantiated, will significantly weaken the persuasiveness of the argument. Therefore, the following information needs to be provided prior to analyze the viability of the argument.

Firstly, the producer assumes that first-time director cannot produce the quality movie and will cause more loss to the studio by taking many takes. For instance, it might be the case that the director is highly talented and can produce the high quality movies. Also, to make wrong judgement prior to his/her work is no good for the team and he should be optimistic rather than pessimistic. If any of the above has merit, then the argument is highly undermined; so, the work of the director needs to be carefully analyzed prior to any judgement.

Similarly, producer assumes that the it is more cheap to use the inexperienced director than using experienced one. He/she doesn't provide any evidences to corroborate his claim. For instance, it might be the case that unexperinced director will waste the time and the movie produced will not be as much quality that would have achieved by using the experienced director. If these is the case, then the argument as a whole is not strengthened.

Furthermore, what are the salary of the actors director and all other staffs involved in the movie? The producer wants to employ the unexperienced director and claims that it would be profitable to use unexperienced director but gives no evidence and information to substantiate it. For instance, it might be possible that using experienced director, more time could be saved; eventually saving alot of money associated with it. If this has any merit then the argument is significantly weakened.

In sum, the argument as a whole makes numerous unwarantted assumption and the evidence provided are inadequate; therefore aforementioned information in the form of systematic research needs to be povided before making any decision.

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Grammar and spelling errors:
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Suggestion:
...alented and can produce the high quality movies. Also, to make wrong judgement pr...
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...nt. Similarly, producer assumes that the it is more cheap to use the inexperienced ...
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...ctor than using experienced one. He/she doesnt provide any evidences to corroborate hi...
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... time and the movie produced will not be as much quality that would have achieved...
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...Furthermore, what are the salary of the actors director and all other staffs involved ...
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Line 7, column 430, Rule ID: SENTENCE_FRAGMENT[1]
Message: “If” at the beginning of a sentence requires a 2nd clause. Maybe a comma, question or exclamation mark is missing, or the sentence is incomplete and should be joined with the following sentence.
...aving alot of money associated with it. If this has any merit then the argument is...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, first, firstly, furthermore, however, if, similarly, so, then, therefore, for instance

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 21.0 19.6327345309 107% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 15.0 12.9520958084 116% => OK
Conjunction : 9.0 11.1786427146 81% => OK
Relative clauses : 9.0 13.6137724551 66% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 25.0 28.8173652695 87% => OK
Preposition: 34.0 55.5748502994 61% => OK
Nominalization: 17.0 16.3942115768 104% => OK

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1841.0 2260.96107784 81% => OK
No of words: 354.0 441.139720559 80% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.20056497175 5.12650576532 101% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.33761313653 4.56307096286 95% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.98416480014 2.78398813304 107% => OK
Unique words: 174.0 204.123752495 85% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.491525423729 0.468620217663 105% => OK
syllable_count: 603.9 705.55239521 86% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.7 1.59920159681 106% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 5.0 4.96107784431 101% => OK
Article: 7.0 8.76447105788 80% => OK
Subordination: 4.0 2.70958083832 148% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 1.67365269461 0% => OK
Preposition: 3.0 4.22255489022 71% => OK

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 16.0 19.7664670659 81% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 22.0 22.8473053892 96% => OK
Sentence length SD: 47.7136232511 57.8364921388 82% => OK
Chars per sentence: 115.0625 119.503703932 96% => OK
Words per sentence: 22.125 23.324526521 95% => OK
Discourse Markers: 6.0625 5.70786347227 106% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 5.15768463074 97% => OK
Language errors: 6.0 5.25449101796 114% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 2.0 8.20758483034 24% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 11.0 6.88822355289 160% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 3.0 4.67664670659 64% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.232333715728 0.218282227539 106% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.079740650489 0.0743258471296 107% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0884181279288 0.0701772020484 126% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.135903381512 0.128457276422 106% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0764153388133 0.0628817314937 122% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 14.1 14.3799401198 98% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 40.69 48.3550499002 84% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.1628742515 123% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 13.1 12.197005988 107% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.88 12.5979740519 102% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.65 8.32208582834 104% => OK
difficult_words: 88.0 98.500998004 89% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 11.0 12.3882235529 89% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.8 11.1389221557 97% => OK
text_standard: 11.0 11.9071856287 92% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Rates: 58.33 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 3.5 Out of 6
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, first, firstly, furthermore, however, if, similarly, so, then, therefore, for instance

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments