Essay topics:
Altruism is a type of behavior in which an animal sacrifices its own interest for that of another animal or group of animals. Altruism is the opposite of selfishness; individuals performing altruistic acts gain nothing for themselves.
Examples of altruism abound, both among humans and among other mammals. Unselfish acts among humans range from the sharing of food with strangers to the donation of body organs to family members, and even to strangers. Such acts are altruistic in that they benefit another, yet provide little reward to the one performing the act.In fact, many species of animals appear willing to sacrifice food, or even their life, to assist other members of their group.
The meerkat, which is a mammal that dwells in burrows in grassland areas of Africa, is often cited as an example. In groups of meerkats, an individual acts as a sentinel, standing guard and looking out for predators while the others hunt for food or eat food they have obtained. If the sentinel meerkat sees a predator such as a hawk approaching the group, it gives an alarm cry alerting the other meerkats to run and seek shelter. By standing guard,the sentinel meerkat gains nothing—it goes without food while the others eat, and it places itself in grave danger. After it issues an alarm, it has to flee alone, which might make it more at risk to a predator, since animals in groups are often able to work together to fend off a predator. So the altruistic sentinel behavior helps ensure the survival of other members of the meerkat’s group.
In the reading passage, the writer talks about the altruism behaviour of the animals and people. The lecturer, however, disagrees with the author of the passage by giving contrasting viewpoints.
Firstly, the writer states about the altruism behaviour of people by giving the example of selfless helping their family members and strangers providing food and donating body parts. But, the speaker disagrees explaining that by doing such acts, the donater or the helper gets a lot of appreciation and their self worth also increases. Also she continues mentioning that such behaviour can't be purely altrustic as his/her value increases in the society.
Apart from that, the writer also claims that the beahvior of meerkat, a mammal, is also altruistic. However, the lecturer contends by saying that, according to recent research, the meerkat who plays role of sentinel eat before guarding and they donot do so without eating. Also, she continues refuting the writer claim that they risk their life for whole group by mentioning that guard meerkat is the safest one as it stands neer the burrow; and also they are the first one to enter their shelter after making warning sound while the other members are at risk.
In sum, both the writer and the speaker have contrasting point of views. Specifically, they have trouble in finding the common ground on this issue.
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 3, column 337, Rule ID: SENT_START_CONJUNCTIVE_LINKING_ADVERB_COMMA[1]
Message: Did you forget a comma after a conjunctive/linking adverb?
Suggestion: Also,
...on and their self worth also increases. Also she continues mentioning that such beha...
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Line 3, column 387, Rule ID: CANT[1]
Message: Did you mean 'can't' or 'cannot'?
Suggestion: can't; cannot
...ontinues mentioning that such behaviour cant be purely altrustic as his/her value i...
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Line 3, column 391, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...nues mentioning that such behaviour cant be purely altrustic as his/her value inc...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, first, firstly, however, if, so, while, apart from
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 5.0 10.4613686534 48% => More to be verbs wanted.
Auxiliary verbs: 0.0 5.04856512141 0% => OK
Conjunction : 8.0 7.30242825607 110% => OK
Relative clauses : 8.0 12.0772626932 66% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 21.0 22.412803532 94% => OK
Preposition: 28.0 30.3222958057 92% => OK
Nominalization: 1.0 5.01324503311 20% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1145.0 1373.03311258 83% => OK
No of words: 224.0 270.72406181 83% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.11160714286 5.08290768461 101% => OK
Fourth root words length: 3.86867284054 4.04702891845 96% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.44948567462 2.5805825403 95% => OK
Unique words: 138.0 145.348785872 95% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.616071428571 0.540411800872 114% => OK
syllable_count: 331.2 419.366225166 79% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.55342163355 97% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 2.0 3.25607064018 61% => OK
Article: 9.0 8.23620309051 109% => OK
Subordination: 0.0 1.25165562914 0% => More adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 1.0 1.51434878587 66% => OK
Preposition: 4.0 2.5761589404 155% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 10.0 13.0662251656 77% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 22.0 21.2450331126 104% => OK
Sentence length SD: 62.5219961294 49.2860985944 127% => OK
Chars per sentence: 114.5 110.228320801 104% => OK
Words per sentence: 22.4 21.698381199 103% => OK
Discourse Markers: 6.1 7.06452816374 86% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.09492273731 98% => OK
Language errors: 3.0 4.19205298013 72% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 5.0 4.33554083885 115% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 2.0 4.45695364238 45% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 3.0 4.27373068433 70% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.0612532377152 0.272083759551 23% => The similarity between the topic and the content is low.
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0251332594737 0.0996497079465 25% => Sentence topic similarity is low.
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0478740228685 0.0662205650399 72% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0409931993304 0.162205337803 25% => Maybe some paragraphs are off the topic.
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0401940056006 0.0443174109184 91% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 13.8 13.3589403974 103% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 57.61 53.8541721854 107% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 5.55761589404 56% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 10.7 11.0289183223 97% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.65 12.2367328918 103% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.89 8.42419426049 106% => OK
difficult_words: 59.0 63.6247240618 93% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 9.0 10.7273730684 84% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.8 10.498013245 103% => OK
text_standard: 11.0 11.2008830022 98% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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It is not exactly right on the topic in the view of e-grader. Maybe there is a wrong essay topic.
Rates: 3.33333333333 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 1.0 Out of 30
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