People’s behavior is largely determined by forces not of their own making.
According to the prompt, people’s behavior is largely determined by forces not of their own making. Since human beings tend to care about other people’s opinion, they cannot easily do what they want. For example, if a teacher asks who has question in his class, and no one responds, you will not raise your question even if you have a question, because you might think that you will bother other students or you are afraid that you will ask a stupid question. In my view, people are influenced by forces beyond their own making, including nature and social norms, and even though some people exhibit deviant behavior, this does not mean that they are not affected by their environments.
To begin with, people’s behavior is confined because of physical barriers. People cannot do something beyond their physical limit. For example, human cannot run faster than leopards, lions, and deer. Additionally, people have to sleep regularly, and if they always deprive them of sleep, they will lose their health. Thus, nature has influence on human, and the influence confines our behavior.
Furthermore, people are suffered from social norms, so they cannot behave unlike other people who already adapt to society. A similar experience of mine can illustrate this point. At around 15-year-old, I loved animations, such as Fate Satay Night, Naruto, and One Piece, and sometimes I went to animation exhibition, but I did not allow my classmates to know my affection, because it might be considered weird in my classroom, where my classmates only like some Taiwanese dramas or NBA. In addition, when I was in high school, I did not like eating too much food, because I was really fat and I was afraid that my classmates might laugh at me and said that my gaining weight was because of my eating habits. Therefore, it is hard for people to do what they want because of social norms.
It might be argued that some people have aberrant behaviors, so their behaviors are determined by themselves: some criminals kill people without any mercy. For instance, Jay Cheng, a dead Taiwanese criminal who was sentenced to death penalty, had killed a lot of people in MRT, and some people say his behavior is because he does not care about the laws. Nevertheless, when looking at his background, we will know that it is his environment that creates him. He grew up in domestic violence, and was always excluded by his classmates. As a result, he hates the whole society, and swears that he will kill people when he has ability. Consequently, his behavior is dependent on the environment, but not the forces out of his own making.
In conclusion, physical limit confines what human can do, social norms affect people’s behavior, and even though some people can exhibit aberrant behavior, it does not mean that they are not affected by their environment.
Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, consequently, furthermore, if, look, nevertheless, really, so, therefore, thus, for example, for instance, in addition, in conclusion, such as, as a result, in my view, to begin with
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 20.0 19.5258426966 102% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 17.0 12.4196629213 137% => OK
Conjunction : 18.0 14.8657303371 121% => OK
Relative clauses : 17.0 11.3162921348 150% => OK
Pronoun: 73.0 33.0505617978 221% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 48.0 58.6224719101 82% => OK
Nominalization: 16.0 12.9106741573 124% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2372.0 2235.4752809 106% => OK
No of words: 481.0 442.535393258 109% => OK
Chars per words: 4.93139293139 5.05705443957 98% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.68313059816 4.55969084622 103% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.63417193417 2.79657885939 94% => OK
Unique words: 238.0 215.323595506 111% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.494802494802 0.4932671777 100% => OK
syllable_count: 720.0 704.065955056 102% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.59117977528 94% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 13.0 6.24550561798 208% => Less pronouns wanted as sentence beginning.
Article: 2.0 4.99550561798 40% => OK
Subordination: 8.0 3.10617977528 258% => Less adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 13.0 1.77640449438 732% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 7.0 4.38483146067 160% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 21.0 20.2370786517 104% => OK
Sentence length: 22.0 23.0359550562 96% => OK
Sentence length SD: 72.3687646381 60.3974514979 120% => OK
Chars per sentence: 112.952380952 118.986275619 95% => OK
Words per sentence: 22.9047619048 23.4991977007 97% => OK
Discourse Markers: 8.90476190476 5.21951772744 171% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.97078651685 101% => OK
Language errors: 0.0 7.80617977528 0% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 7.0 10.2758426966 68% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 8.0 5.13820224719 156% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 6.0 4.83258426966 124% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.296895204722 0.243740707755 122% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.110472509938 0.0831039109588 133% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.146847580769 0.0758088955206 194% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.17675291234 0.150359130593 118% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0794988939024 0.0667264976115 119% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 13.2 14.1392134831 93% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 57.61 48.8420337079 118% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 7.92365168539 39% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 10.7 12.1743820225 88% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.61 12.1639044944 95% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.91 8.38706741573 94% => OK
difficult_words: 97.0 100.480337079 97% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 13.0 11.8971910112 109% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.8 11.2143820225 96% => OK
text_standard: 11.0 11.7820224719 93% => OK
What are above readability scores?
---------------------
Rates: 58.33 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 3.5 Out of 6
---------------------
Note: the e-grader does NOT examine the meaning of words and ideas. VIP users will receive further evaluations by advanced module of e-grader and human graders.