A person who knowingly commits a crime has broken the social contract and should not retain any civil rights or the right to benefit from his or her own labor.
Write a response in which you discuss the extent to which you agree or disagree with the claim and the reason on which that claim is based.
Crime refers to a deviation from the norms or standards set by societies. It is essential that a country holds up its reputation in implementing its law against criminals. And this implementation includes punishment as a consequence of the crime the individual has carried out. And this implementation includes punishment as a consequence of the crime the individual has carried out. Every country has different laws related to criminal offenses and the degree of punishments associated with it. The author suggests a different idea, in his opinion, the criminal should not retain civil rights or the right to benefit from his or her labor. However, in my view, I disagree with the author and in doing so, would like to mention two reasons as to why I support this stand against the prompt.
The two rights mentioned in the prompt i.e the civil rights and benefit from one's labor are two major rights that are responsible for providing its citizens. Strip away the civil rights, and one can see the same consequences that one sees in a third-world country having no law and order. For instance, consider the example of a country like North Korea. People in that country, are treated as slaves of the government and the punishments that they have to come by for even committing a minor crime are pretty unbearable and nasty, leaving the suspect to live in a place like a hell by depriving all the civil rights and alienating one from the society for the rest of one's life. The same thing can be asserted for the given topic, depriving one of his social and civil rights can play as a hugely negative factor in one's mind and shackle him completely. The consequence put forward by the prompt, in its core, questions the citizenship of a crime doer. So I feel, this is not the right way to make a person pay for his wrong-doings.
The second point I'd like to put forth is from the "means of living" perspective. The question is, will enact such an idea has a disastrous effect on the lives of those around him or her? Isn't the family of a man dependent on the head of the house. If we deny his right to earn or benefit from the labor he does, we are indirectly denying his means to earn, which in turn denies the mode by which he provides for his family needs. Thus in implementing such an idea practically, it will only lead to much more brokenness in the society, and if pondered more deeply, would cause further crimes to be committed in the name for survival.
Thus, I'd like to conclude, that, the denial of the civil rights and the rights for benefitting from labor would carry with itself disastrous consequences, such as which we might not be able to imagine, as we haven't seen it around us. The most accepted, by default punishment for the crimes in various societies are implemented by a term in prison, or other probation centers, so that the man committing the crime can realize of his mistake, and might find repentance by bearing the consequence.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
however, if, second, so, third, thus, as to, for instance, i feel, such as, in my view
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 13.0 19.5258426966 67% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 12.0 12.4196629213 97% => OK
Conjunction : 21.0 14.8657303371 141% => OK
Relative clauses : 9.0 11.3162921348 80% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 45.0 33.0505617978 136% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 77.0 58.6224719101 131% => OK
Nominalization: 17.0 12.9106741573 132% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2449.0 2235.4752809 110% => OK
No of words: 526.0 442.535393258 119% => OK
Chars per words: 4.65589353612 5.05705443957 92% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.78901763229 4.55969084622 105% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.71041660915 2.79657885939 97% => OK
Unique words: 252.0 215.323595506 117% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.479087452471 0.4932671777 97% => OK
syllable_count: 760.5 704.065955056 108% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.4 1.59117977528 88% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 5.0 6.24550561798 80% => OK
Article: 9.0 4.99550561798 180% => OK
Subordination: 3.0 3.10617977528 97% => OK
Conjunction: 6.0 1.77640449438 338% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 4.0 4.38483146067 91% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 21.0 20.2370786517 104% => OK
Sentence length: 25.0 23.0359550562 109% => OK
Sentence length SD: 67.2365438915 60.3974514979 111% => OK
Chars per sentence: 116.619047619 118.986275619 98% => OK
Words per sentence: 25.0476190476 23.4991977007 107% => OK
Discourse Markers: 4.09523809524 5.21951772744 78% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.97078651685 80% => OK
Language errors: 9.0 7.80617977528 115% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 6.0 10.2758426966 58% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 14.0 5.13820224719 272% => Less negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 1.0 4.83258426966 21% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.265395002975 0.243740707755 109% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0739406081136 0.0831039109588 89% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0809465522881 0.0758088955206 107% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.16293479705 0.150359130593 108% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0113188651233 0.0667264976115 17% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 13.0 14.1392134831 92% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 63.02 48.8420337079 129% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 7.92365168539 39% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 10.7 12.1743820225 88% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 10.04 12.1639044944 83% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.09 8.38706741573 96% => OK
difficult_words: 107.0 100.480337079 106% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 8.5 11.8971910112 71% => OK
gunning_fog: 12.0 11.2143820225 107% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 11.7820224719 76% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5/6 paragraphs with 3/4 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: reason 4. address both of the views presented for reason 4 (optional)
para 6: conclusion.
Rates: 58.33 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 3.5 Out of 6
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