"Society should identify those children who have special talents and provide training for them at an early age to develop their talents."
Write a response in which you discuss the extent to which you agree or disagree with the recommendation and explain your reasoning for the position you take. In developing and supporting your position, describe specific circumstances in which adopting the recommendation would or would not be advantageous and explain how these examples shape your position.
Most people would agree that a talented person should be developed from the early childhood to become successful in the future. However, there is another side of the issue which has to do with personal choice and freedom. Not every child would be eager to work diligently 8 hours a week to win competitions, while he could spend spare time with his friends.
I disagree with the statement in its presented form, but I do agree that society should provide the environment for talented children to develop their skills. It is important for the future of the society, as contributors are likely to be distinguished from peers in their young years already. In addition, some activities require immersion from the very early age. However, it is crucial not to dissuade one from the particular occupation in the future because of the social pressure in childhood.
Society needs to take care of its future generation, by providing safety and giving opportunities to them. The scent of competition and fame flowing in the air, along with pecuniary prizes are great tools to attract and distinguish talented children. The TV show “Voice” has already given the world exquisite young singers who are likely to create future musical industry. Subject olympiads held among high school students are the basis for the future of Academia. So, the society should create opportunities and instill the love for work in talented children to prosper.
In addition, there are occupations that require immersion from the very age and are indispensable parts of our culture. Almost every successful sportsmen began rigorous practicing since the first decade of existence. A girls may become a ballet dancer only if she started practicing since the age of four, because afterwards human body is said to be inflexible. Thus, it is important to find out talents and propensities in children in the early age to give them the best chance to succeed.
However, one should bear in mind that talented children are also people with their own desires and world view. A persistent goading from parents may result in a repulsion that a child feel towards the occupation he used to like in the past. While society should give every opportunity for children to identify themselves as early as possible, it should not push them do so. In Russia a lot of parents dream about their children playing a musical instrument, but according to statistics, more than 80 per cent hate playing music because of their memories from childhood. If children are uncompromisingly pushed to do things they do not want to do, they resist. In fact, the result is not beneficial for anyone, thus, this strategy is a failure.
Overall, I believe that the society should give opportunities for talented children via subsidising successful children and conducting contests. However, no persistence is advised.
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 9, column 66, Rule ID: BEEN_PART_AGREEMENT[2]
Message: Consider using a past participle here: 'peopled'.
Suggestion: peopled
...in mind that talented children are also people with their own desires and world view. ...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, first, however, if, may, so, still, thus, while, as to, in addition, in fact
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 20.0 19.5258426966 102% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 12.0 12.4196629213 97% => OK
Conjunction : 11.0 14.8657303371 74% => OK
Relative clauses : 8.0 11.3162921348 71% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 32.0 33.0505617978 97% => OK
Preposition: 68.0 58.6224719101 116% => OK
Nominalization: 11.0 12.9106741573 85% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2406.0 2235.4752809 108% => OK
No of words: 471.0 442.535393258 106% => OK
Chars per words: 5.10828025478 5.05705443957 101% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.65859790218 4.55969084622 102% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.84161314394 2.79657885939 102% => OK
Unique words: 245.0 215.323595506 114% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.52016985138 0.4932671777 105% => OK
syllable_count: 753.3 704.065955056 107% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.59117977528 101% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 8.0 6.24550561798 128% => OK
Interrogative: 0.0 0.740449438202 0% => OK
Article: 6.0 4.99550561798 120% => OK
Subordination: 5.0 3.10617977528 161% => OK
Conjunction: 2.0 1.77640449438 113% => OK
Preposition: 6.0 4.38483146067 137% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 24.0 20.2370786517 119% => OK
Sentence length: 19.0 23.0359550562 82% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 31.7994747948 60.3974514979 53% => The essay contains lots of sentences with the similar length. More sentence varieties wanted.
Chars per sentence: 100.25 118.986275619 84% => OK
Words per sentence: 19.625 23.4991977007 84% => OK
Discourse Markers: 3.625 5.21951772744 69% => OK
Paragraphs: 6.0 4.97078651685 121% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 7.80617977528 13% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 15.0 10.2758426966 146% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 5.0 5.13820224719 97% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 4.0 4.83258426966 83% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.255552552041 0.243740707755 105% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0690352049316 0.0831039109588 83% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0643935379474 0.0758088955206 85% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.130381251247 0.150359130593 87% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.034373188243 0.0667264976115 52% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 12.5 14.1392134831 88% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 52.19 48.8420337079 107% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.92365168539 111% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 10.7 12.1743820225 88% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.36 12.1639044944 102% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.93 8.38706741573 95% => OK
difficult_words: 100.0 100.480337079 100% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 11.0 11.8971910112 92% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.6 11.2143820225 86% => OK
text_standard: 11.0 11.7820224719 93% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 54.17 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 3.25 Out of 6
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