Every human is born with different potential and capability. Some are born with excessive physical strength, some with acute mathematical skills and others with natural inclination in arts. Nonetheless, one still needs to hone their skills despite naturally gifted ability. Any individual will have greater chances of success if they pick their educational career in the field of their own interest and commensurate to their strength. Let us scrutinize the argument more deeply.
First of all, now a days the student makes up their mind in very early stages of their life. They tend to choose, what they want to be, at early stages of school. Since every student has the right to pursue their career in accordance with their potential, forcefully imposing any idea on them might lead to drop out from the school or in some cases it will eventually lead to failure. Consider for example, a student who is physically more active and stronger will usually have his/her interest in sports. If that student is forced to pursue academics degree then that this decision might lead to his failure. On the other hand, if the same person is allowed to pursue his/her field on interest, who knows, that person could be a great sportsman representing his nation at Olympics. Most of the studies has concluded that probability of success is more or less associated with interests of students.
Contrary to that, if a student chooses to study specific subjects just because of the more opportunities to secure a job then he will certainly face many challenges while studying. There may be a juncture when the student will be exhausted due to lack of interest in the subject. While even if one manages to graduate then the chances are thin that he will be able to secure good grades. And today when there is more demand of super specialization and sagacious employees, his degree will worth no more than a sheaf of papers. In addition to that the market trend keeps on changing and follow no particular order. The availability of the job depends on “demand and supply”. For instance, if a student chooses to study computer science because of the then demand and the scenario changed till he graduated. There are now a greater number of graduated students then any previous year and the demand remains the same. In this case only handful of most talented students will be chosen by the employer to get best result from them.
Moreover, the idea of picking a career based on the availability of job has prevailed in mid nineteenth century since that was the age of industrial revolution and other majors such as sports, arts and music had fewer opportunities. But today even the government is insisting parents to let students choose their filed of interest thereby rendering greater chance of success to them and overall growth of the nation.
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 3, column 15, Rule ID: NOW_A_DAYS[1]
Message: Did you mean 'nowadays'?
Suggestion: nowadays
...argument more deeply. First of all, now a days the student makes up their mind in very...
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Line 3, column 19, Rule ID: A_PLURAL[1]
Message: Don't use indefinite articles with plural words. Did you mean 'a day' or simply 'days'?
Suggestion: a day; days
...ment more deeply. First of all, now a days the student makes up their mind in very...
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Line 3, column 507, Rule ID: SENTENCE_FRAGMENT[1]
Message: “If” at the beginning of a sentence requires a 2nd clause. Maybe a comma, question or exclamation mark is missing, or the sentence is incomplete and should be joined with the following sentence.
...sually have his her interest in sports. If that student is forced to pursue academ...
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Line 5, column 653, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
.... The availability of the job depends on apos;demand and supply apos;. For instan...
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Line 5, column 1012, Rule ID: THE_SUPERLATIVE[4]
Message: A determiner is probably missing here: 'get the best'.
Suggestion: get the best
...dents will be chosen by the employer to get best result from them. Moreover, the ide...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, first, if, may, moreover, nonetheless, so, still, then, while, for example, for instance, in addition, such as, first of all, in some cases, more or less, on the other hand
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 17.0 19.5258426966 87% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 12.0 12.4196629213 97% => OK
Conjunction : 16.0 14.8657303371 108% => OK
Relative clauses : 12.0 11.3162921348 106% => OK
Pronoun: 37.0 33.0505617978 112% => OK
Preposition: 75.0 58.6224719101 128% => OK
Nominalization: 9.0 12.9106741573 70% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2365.0 2235.4752809 106% => OK
No of words: 484.0 442.535393258 109% => OK
Chars per words: 4.88636363636 5.05705443957 97% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.69041575982 4.55969084622 103% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.61692864214 2.79657885939 94% => OK
Unique words: 254.0 215.323595506 118% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.52479338843 0.4932671777 106% => OK
syllable_count: 738.9 704.065955056 105% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.59117977528 94% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 3.0 6.24550561798 48% => OK
Article: 3.0 4.99550561798 60% => OK
Subordination: 6.0 3.10617977528 193% => OK
Conjunction: 2.0 1.77640449438 113% => OK
Preposition: 5.0 4.38483146067 114% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 23.0 20.2370786517 114% => OK
Sentence length: 21.0 23.0359550562 91% => OK
Sentence length SD: 48.5529352731 60.3974514979 80% => OK
Chars per sentence: 102.826086957 118.986275619 86% => OK
Words per sentence: 21.0434782609 23.4991977007 90% => OK
Discourse Markers: 7.69565217391 5.21951772744 147% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.97078651685 80% => OK
Language errors: 5.0 7.80617977528 64% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 13.0 10.2758426966 127% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 7.0 5.13820224719 136% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 3.0 4.83258426966 62% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.240615949625 0.243740707755 99% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0614920069068 0.0831039109588 74% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0484980419657 0.0758088955206 64% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.140192053852 0.150359130593 93% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0186781843642 0.0667264976115 28% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 12.1 14.1392134831 86% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 58.62 48.8420337079 120% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.92365168539 111% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 10.3 12.1743820225 85% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.08 12.1639044944 91% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.56 8.38706741573 102% => OK
difficult_words: 119.0 100.480337079 118% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 7.5 11.8971910112 63% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.4 11.2143820225 93% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 11.7820224719 76% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5/6 paragraphs with 3/4 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: reason 4. address both of the views presented for reason 4 (optional)
para 6: conclusion.
Rates: 58.33 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 3.5 Out of 6
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