Government financing has twofold effects on arts’ integrity, and both opinions, presented in the passage, can be backed with sound arguments and examples. I personally believe that art’s integrity is not threatened by financial support; moreover this helps arts to thrive.
First of all, we can see a lot of changes in consumer behavior, and arts are not an exemption. It can be noted that art is a means of expression and it does not obey the market rules, but a deeper analysis of nowadays trends will give another answer. There are a lot of schools of arts and faculties in universities effectively competing in education market. Another example of the current developments is the share of the artists working in the market and selling their works. They truly depend on market conditions. As it was mentioned, art is a form of expression and not all artists undergo the market conditions, and, despite their financial situation, they go on creating masterpieces. I think that this particular segment of artists is vulnerable to financial situation and their needs for support are of primary importance. This incentive will help them out and make possible to concentrate on their works without any harm to creativity. Thus, it will ensure the development of art.
We can argue that there are a lot of other places that need financing such as health and education, and it is by no means questionable. I think that there are some forms of art that are as important as the above mentioned fields. The most important field to be mentioned is the one that preserves historical events and represents them in an artistic form. Their depiction helps not only save the history for future generations, but also resembles the soul of the times. It can be easily seen that he financing of art is important for the sake of history, which is crucial for every nation.
The proponents of the view that government financing of arts hampers its integrity can bring examples of inefficient financing. For example, the government enables funding for a specific filed of arts, thus depleting resources for financing other fields. This, of course, will lead to underdevelopment of many forms of arts, therefore hindering their prosperity.
To conclude, I would like to say that both opinions are plausible, but I still keep the side of my opinion. I think that properly organized financing of the field will help it to flourish and be beneficial to overall society.
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 3, column 501, Rule ID: HE_VERB_AGR[6]
Message: 'He' in subjunctive clause must be used base form of the verb: 'finance'.
Suggestion: finance
...he times. It can be easily seen that he financing of art is important for the sake of his...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, first, if, moreover, so, still, therefore, thus, for example, i think, of course, such as, first of all
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 22.0 19.5258426966 113% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 13.0 12.4196629213 105% => OK
Conjunction : 16.0 14.8657303371 108% => OK
Relative clauses : 13.0 11.3162921348 115% => OK
Pronoun: 43.0 33.0505617978 130% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 54.0 58.6224719101 92% => OK
Nominalization: 13.0 12.9106741573 101% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2051.0 2235.4752809 92% => OK
No of words: 412.0 442.535393258 93% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.97815533981 5.05705443957 98% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.50530610838 4.55969084622 99% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.89128410112 2.79657885939 103% => OK
Unique words: 216.0 215.323595506 100% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.52427184466 0.4932671777 106% => OK
syllable_count: 639.9 704.065955056 91% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.59117977528 101% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 14.0 6.24550561798 224% => Less pronouns wanted as sentence beginning.
Article: 3.0 4.99550561798 60% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 3.10617977528 32% => OK
Conjunction: 6.0 1.77640449438 338% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 3.0 4.38483146067 68% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 21.0 20.2370786517 104% => OK
Sentence length: 19.0 23.0359550562 82% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 31.0508324367 60.3974514979 51% => The essay contains lots of sentences with the similar length. More sentence varieties wanted.
Chars per sentence: 97.6666666667 118.986275619 82% => OK
Words per sentence: 19.619047619 23.4991977007 83% => OK
Discourse Markers: 5.42857142857 5.21951772744 104% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.97078651685 101% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 7.80617977528 13% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 14.0 10.2758426966 136% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 2.0 5.13820224719 39% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 5.0 4.83258426966 103% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.289095980346 0.243740707755 119% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0818435933061 0.0831039109588 98% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0750828130845 0.0758088955206 99% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.156356102534 0.150359130593 104% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0831371213825 0.0667264976115 125% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 11.8 14.1392134831 83% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 52.19 48.8420337079 107% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.92365168539 111% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 10.7 12.1743820225 88% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.6 12.1639044944 95% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.68 8.38706741573 103% => OK
difficult_words: 107.0 100.480337079 106% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 11.0 11.8971910112 92% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.6 11.2143820225 86% => OK
text_standard: 12.0 11.7820224719 102% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 50.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 3.0 Out of 6
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