Some people believe that increasing violence in the media is the cause of increasing violence in our society, especially among children. Others believe that children's peer groups and parental role models are a much more influence on children's behavior.
The issue of increasing vilolence in the society, especially in the younger generation is of prime importance. I believe that the increase in violent behaviour amongst the children is due to children getting effected negatively by by their friends and more importantly by their parents, whom they look up as a role models. Children try to the pick up the habits of their peer group in the attempts to fit in and to stay competitive in this modern society. Furthermore, children look to their parents in their early life as their role models, picking up certain nuances and continuing them in their adult lives.
To begin with, children have the tendency to emulate their peers group. More often than not, children will make same choices as their friends, and these choices are often bad ones. This tendency to look like their friends, or prerhaps trying to trump their friends in order to look aplomb results in children being violent. Children in bad company often pick up habits like bullying in school, and grow up to be violent in life. Studies have shown that school bullys often end up in correctional facilities for horrific crimes like murder, arson etc. in their adult life.
Most children look up to their parents as role models, and if parents don't demonstrate good values, it has a negative affect on the child. Studies conducted have shown that children when they see their parents indulging in habits like drug use, pick up those habits in later point in their life. These delinquencies have a negative effect on a child's life.
Some may argue, that violence in the popular media is the cause of increase in violence in the society because children try to imitate the characters in the movie. However, this argument is flawed because access to such media is higly regulated with theatre strictly enforcing the guidelines set up by the motion pictures. And even if the children get access to such media, it doesn't impact them as much as it is on-screen, compared to what they observe off-screen.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
furthermore, however, if, look, may, so, to begin with
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 9.0 19.5258426966 46% => More to be verbs wanted.
Auxiliary verbs: 2.0 12.4196629213 16% => OK
Conjunction : 8.0 14.8657303371 54% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 6.0 11.3162921348 53% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 34.0 33.0505617978 103% => OK
Preposition: 65.0 58.6224719101 111% => OK
Nominalization: 6.0 12.9106741573 46% => More nominalization wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1687.0 2235.4752809 75% => OK
No of words: 349.0 442.535393258 79% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.83381088825 5.05705443957 96% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.32221490584 4.55969084622 95% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.44478269429 2.79657885939 87% => OK
Unique words: 178.0 215.323595506 83% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.510028653295 0.4932671777 103% => OK
syllable_count: 512.1 704.065955056 73% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.59117977528 94% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 7.0 6.24550561798 112% => OK
Interrogative: 1.0 0.740449438202 135% => OK
Article: 1.0 4.99550561798 20% => OK
Subordination: 0.0 3.10617977528 0% => More adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 5.0 1.77640449438 281% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 2.0 4.38483146067 46% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 16.0 20.2370786517 79% => OK
Sentence length: 21.0 23.0359550562 91% => OK
Sentence length SD: 44.2634160453 60.3974514979 73% => OK
Chars per sentence: 105.4375 118.986275619 89% => OK
Words per sentence: 21.8125 23.4991977007 93% => OK
Discourse Markers: 3.375 5.21951772744 65% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.97078651685 80% => OK
Language errors: 3.0 7.80617977528 38% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 7.0 10.2758426966 68% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 6.0 5.13820224719 117% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 3.0 4.83258426966 62% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.275196264269 0.243740707755 113% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.101600766598 0.0831039109588 122% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0769464987459 0.0758088955206 102% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.176336760425 0.150359130593 117% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0546348868606 0.0667264976115 82% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 12.2 14.1392134831 86% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 58.62 48.8420337079 120% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 7.92365168539 39% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 10.3 12.1743820225 85% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 10.73 12.1639044944 88% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.3 8.38706741573 99% => OK
difficult_words: 80.0 100.480337079 80% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 14.0 11.8971910112 118% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.4 11.2143820225 93% => OK
text_standard: 11.0 11.7820224719 93% => OK
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Rates: 62.5 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 3.75 Out of 6
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