Some people believe that it is helpful to view a challenging situation as an opportunity for
personal growth. Others believe that reimagining challenging situations this way occupies
too much of the focus one needs to face challenges effectively.
Undoubtedly, our modern life is much more complicated than the past because of a lot of problems we face during our life. While many people believe that view a challenging situation is helpful for personal grows, others agree with obverse idea. Nevertheless, from my point of view, I think veiw a challeinging condition can be usefult to people. I feel this way for two reasons, which I will explore in the following essay.
To begin with, imagining of challeng help people to know their capabality and talent, which help them to realise their positive and negative characteristic aspects. This is obvious that pepole are different, and act different in each situation. Thus, each person with knowing his weakness can focus on it to find out a solution for this, to face dramatic problem. For example, students at high school learn how to prepare themselves for future problems. My own experience is a compelling example of this. When I had been studying at high school, there was a course in how to put down your anger during challenges. The teacher learned us how to know about situation, and how to act when we are facing the problem. During the test, I underestood what is my weakness, so I decided to solve my problem and be strong. After while, when I was angry about a situation I performed the methods that I learned before.
Forthurmore, knowing about situations help us to know that our life is not always in peace. In fact, with imagination of situations, we learn that there are something that can effect our life. Some of this events are very dramatic such as: Divorce, losing parent, war, unemployment for long time, and losing children. Although we need serious aid during this situations, we have to learn how to face with this challenges. For example, I lost my job last after five years working on the great project. Because of losing my job all my time and energy seemd to be wasted, but I knew about unemployment, and I was prepared myself for this situation. Thus, the next year based on my experience I create my own compony.
In conclusion, I strongly belive that people should veiw the challenge and focus on personal grows, which is very importantby knowing weakness, and be optimistic.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, if, nevertheless, so, thus, while, for example, i feel, i think, in conclusion, in fact, such as, to begin with
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 19.0 19.5258426966 97% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 6.0 12.4196629213 48% => OK
Conjunction : 11.0 14.8657303371 74% => OK
Relative clauses : 13.0 11.3162921348 115% => OK
Pronoun: 57.0 33.0505617978 172% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 55.0 58.6224719101 94% => OK
Nominalization: 12.0 12.9106741573 93% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1838.0 2235.4752809 82% => OK
No of words: 383.0 442.535393258 87% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.79895561358 5.05705443957 95% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.42384287591 4.55969084622 97% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.72131060896 2.79657885939 97% => OK
Unique words: 209.0 215.323595506 97% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.545691906005 0.4932671777 111% => OK
syllable_count: 561.6 704.065955056 80% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.59117977528 94% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 10.0 6.24550561798 160% => OK
Article: 2.0 4.99550561798 40% => OK
Subordination: 6.0 3.10617977528 193% => OK
Conjunction: 6.0 1.77640449438 338% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 9.0 4.38483146067 205% => Less preposition wanted as sentence beginnings.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 21.0 20.2370786517 104% => OK
Sentence length: 18.0 23.0359550562 78% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 28.19256749 60.3974514979 47% => The essay contains lots of sentences with the similar length. More sentence varieties wanted.
Chars per sentence: 87.5238095238 118.986275619 74% => OK
Words per sentence: 18.2380952381 23.4991977007 78% => OK
Discourse Markers: 5.52380952381 5.21951772744 106% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.97078651685 80% => OK
Language errors: 3.0 7.80617977528 38% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 7.0 10.2758426966 68% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 10.0 5.13820224719 195% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 4.0 4.83258426966 83% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.230463268116 0.243740707755 95% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0653155504681 0.0831039109588 79% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0789602730019 0.0758088955206 104% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.15667434571 0.150359130593 104% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0610226437305 0.0667264976115 91% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 10.3 14.1392134831 73% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 61.67 48.8420337079 126% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 7.92365168539 39% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.1 12.1743820225 75% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 10.56 12.1639044944 87% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.07 8.38706741573 96% => OK
difficult_words: 86.0 100.480337079 86% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 11.0 11.8971910112 92% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.2 11.2143820225 82% => OK
text_standard: 11.0 11.7820224719 93% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5/6 paragraphs with 3/4 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: reason 4. address both of the views presented for reason 4 (optional)
para 6: conclusion.
Rates: 50.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 3.0 Out of 6
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Note: the e-grader does NOT examine the meaning of words and ideas. VIP users will receive further evaluations by advanced module of e-grader and human graders.