Do you agree or disagree? If people have the opportunity to get a secure job, they should take it right away rather than wait for a job that would be more satisfying.
Undoubtedly, the modern era is much more complicated than the past, and nowadays living without a job is really hard for a lot of people. In fact, people always want to have a comfortable life, but our dreams are difficult to reach, and we have to work hard, and attempt to be successful. While, a large number of of people believe that taking a secure job is better than waiting for ideal job, others have an obverse idea. Nevertheless, in my point of view, waiting for a satisfying job is not good approach, and I feel this way for two reasons, which I will explore in the following essay.
To begin with, people have little chance to get a secure job, and this is not logical to reject offers and wait for better job. Moreover, competition for available job positions is rising because of limited resources and population growth. There is no doubt that waiting for good opportunity seems reasonable at first, but after comprehensive evaluation of situation, it helps people to avoid waiting. for example, in my country, finding a secure job for doctoral students after graduation is completely difficult, and they have to apply for a lot of possible positions to find a job to pay for their life. In addition, they all have family that they should support, and having responsibility do not let them to waste their time for better job, even if they got a job with pretty low salary. Thus, this seems perfect to get a job when you don't have another option, because without the job we can't afford for our living, and our family need money not our satisfaction.
Furthermore, people don’t risk their whole career by taking a usual job because they can get a better job in the future. In fact, nowadays there is no contract to obligate people to stay for thirty years, and work in the same job for whole life time, so this is obvious that in this situation if a person feels that the job is not satisfying, she can quit the job, and find another job. Actually, people should get experience about a lot of jobs to find their talent and interests, which helps them to know which job can be fit for them. However, we have limited time to spent in the different work settings, but the value of being happy will worth it to search a better job by involving in a lot of jobs not by waiting. Therefore, people can be more successful if they accept each opportunity they get, and be optimistic about the future.
In conclusion, I strongly believe that people should get secure job when they have this opportunity. This is because we have small chance for finding a secure job, and we can change our first job if we don’t like it.
Grammar and spelling errors:
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Message: Specify a number, remove phrase, or simply use 'many' or 'numerous'
Suggestion: many; numerous
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Suggestion: of
...to be successful. While, a large number of of people believe that taking a secure job...
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Message: This sentence does not start with an uppercase letter
Suggestion: For
...tion, it helps people to avoid waiting. for example, in my country, finding a secur...
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Message: Possible spelling mistake found
Suggestion: don't
...his seems perfect to get a job when you dont have another option, because without th...
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Message: Did you mean 'can't' or 'cannot'?
Suggestion: can't; cannot
...ther option, because without the job we cant afford for our living, and our family n...
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Line 4, column 240, Rule ID: LIFE_TIME[1]
Message: Did you mean 'lifetime'?
Suggestion: lifetime
...ars, and work in the same job for whole life time, so this is obvious that in this situat...
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Message: This verb is normally not used in the progressive form. Try a simple form instead.
...ituation if a person feels that the job is not satisfying, she can quit the job, and find another...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
actually, but, first, furthermore, however, if, moreover, nevertheless, really, so, therefore, thus, while, for example, i feel, in addition, in conclusion, in fact, no doubt, to begin with
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 18.0 15.1003584229 119% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 11.0 9.8082437276 112% => OK
Conjunction : 18.0 13.8261648746 130% => OK
Relative clauses : 11.0 11.0286738351 100% => OK
Pronoun: 49.0 43.0788530466 114% => OK
Preposition: 55.0 52.1666666667 105% => OK
Nominalization: 9.0 8.0752688172 111% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2159.0 1977.66487455 109% => OK
No of words: 474.0 407.700716846 116% => OK
Chars per words: 4.55485232068 4.8611393121 94% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.66599839874 4.48103885553 104% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.52585219687 2.67179642975 95% => OK
Unique words: 218.0 212.727598566 102% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.459915611814 0.524837075471 88% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 670.5 618.680645161 108% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.4 1.51630824373 92% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 7.0 9.59856630824 73% => OK
Article: 2.0 3.08781362007 65% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 3.51792114695 57% => OK
Conjunction: 15.0 1.86738351254 803% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 7.0 4.94265232975 142% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 17.0 20.6003584229 83% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 27.0 20.1344086022 134% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 39.8943240753 48.9658058833 81% => OK
Chars per sentence: 127.0 100.406767564 126% => OK
Words per sentence: 27.8823529412 20.6045352989 135% => OK
Discourse Markers: 11.1176470588 5.45110844103 204% => Less transition words/phrases wanted.
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 7.0 5.5376344086 126% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 14.0 11.8709677419 118% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 3.0 3.85842293907 78% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 0.0 4.88709677419 0% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.476355343244 0.236089414692 202% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.188861367967 0.076458572812 247% => Sentence topic similarity is high.
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0669026452267 0.0737576698707 91% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.328077162641 0.150856017488 217% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0401920933491 0.0645574589148 62% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 13.9 11.7677419355 118% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 60.99 58.1214874552 105% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.5 10.1575268817 113% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 9.41 10.9000537634 86% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.61 8.01818996416 95% => OK
difficult_words: 79.0 86.8835125448 91% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 13.5 10.002688172 135% => OK
gunning_fog: 12.8 10.0537634409 127% => OK
text_standard: 14.0 10.247311828 137% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 73.3333333333 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 22.0 Out of 30
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