Do you agree or disagree with the following statement? In the past, young people depended too much on their parents to make decisions for them; today young people are better able to make decisions about their own lives. Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer.
Undoubtedly, our modern life is much more complicated than the past. While many people believe that young people were dependent on their parents to show way of living for them, others agree with obverse idea. Nevertheless, from my point of view, I think nowadays young people are independent and they can make decisions by themselves. I feel this way for several reasons, wihch I will explore in the following essay.
to begin with, in the modern era young people are more capable to take risk in their life because they have more knowledge and skills than the youth in the past. In fact, being independent, risky decisions, and learning from mistakes are admired by the society, which make possible that young people don't afraid about decision making. Moreover, young people in the society have a lot of rights as a citizen that allow them to make their own decisions from the younger ages. All these factors cause young people to avoid dependency to their parents. As a result, young people baceme less and less dependent to their parents even on big decisions. For example, in our country, parents cannot obligate their children in choosing of study area, and each students has right to select fir program without knowing parents view.
Forthuremore, today parents have to work hard in oreder to provide living expence. In the past parents have a lot of free times to spend with their children, and this help them to communicate with their children very well from the young ages. The more they took care of their children, the more their children relaied on their parents.This is obvious, if we don't spend enough time with our kids, they will bacome independent persons. Therefore because of our complex life children have learned to become independent person and make decisions by themselves. My own experience is a compelling example of this. When I was a child, my father and me always went to the tripe and he helped me for everything. actually we spent such a great time with each other, but this made me a dependent person because I have always needed my father to be there for me. Mentally this makes me a person with no independency, and even now I need my father's help. thus, one of the major reasons of being dependence in decisions making is dependenigh too much to parents.
In conclusion, I strongly believe that young people are independent in the modern era. This is because the society encurage them to be independent individuals, and also parents have no free time to spend effectively with their children.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
actually, also, but, if, moreover, nevertheless, so, therefore, thus, well, while, for example, i feel, i think, in conclusion, in fact, as a result, to begin with
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 15.0 15.1003584229 99% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 5.0 9.8082437276 51% => OK
Conjunction : 12.0 13.8261648746 87% => OK
Relative clauses : 6.0 11.0286738351 54% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 58.0 43.0788530466 135% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 64.0 52.1666666667 123% => OK
Nominalization: 3.0 8.0752688172 37% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2096.0 1977.66487455 106% => OK
No of words: 434.0 407.700716846 106% => OK
Chars per words: 4.82949308756 4.8611393121 99% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.56428161445 4.48103885553 102% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.55413889113 2.67179642975 96% => OK
Unique words: 214.0 212.727598566 101% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.493087557604 0.524837075471 94% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 648.9 618.680645161 105% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.51630824373 99% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 9.0 9.59856630824 94% => OK
Article: 2.0 3.08781362007 65% => OK
Subordination: 4.0 3.51792114695 114% => OK
Conjunction: 6.0 1.86738351254 321% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 7.0 4.94265232975 142% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 21.0 20.6003584229 102% => OK
Sentence length: 20.0 20.1344086022 99% => OK
Sentence length SD: 39.146390757 48.9658058833 80% => OK
Chars per sentence: 99.8095238095 100.406767564 99% => OK
Words per sentence: 20.6666666667 20.6045352989 100% => OK
Discourse Markers: 7.7619047619 5.45110844103 142% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 8.0 5.5376344086 144% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 10.0 11.8709677419 84% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 2.0 3.85842293907 52% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 9.0 4.88709677419 184% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.414297032026 0.236089414692 175% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.13211460869 0.076458572812 173% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0800414186175 0.0737576698707 109% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.275225437293 0.150856017488 182% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0930005818347 0.0645574589148 144% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 11.7 11.7677419355 99% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 59.64 58.1214874552 103% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.9 10.1575268817 97% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 10.73 10.9000537634 98% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.68 8.01818996416 96% => OK
difficult_words: 84.0 86.8835125448 97% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 11.0 10.002688172 110% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.0 10.0537634409 99% => OK
text_standard: 10.0 10.247311828 98% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 76.6666666667 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 23.0 Out of 30
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