Some parent offer their school age children money for each high grade mark they get in school Do you think this is a good idea Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer
Undoubtedly, our modern life is much more complicated than the past and being a good parent is very hard nowadays. In my opinion, parents can give money to their children for their good results after final exams. I feel this way for two reasons, which I will explore in the following essay.
To begin with, giving money encourage children for being more competitive in the classroom which, helps them to focus very well and being successful in courses. There is no doubt that prizes are very attractive for children and it could have positive effect on children education. For example, my brother is a high school student and his grades was very low. Moreover, he spent his whole time with friends playing video games. My parent had a deal with him and told him that if he get a fair score in Math and Biology, they will give him big amount of money and he accepted it. As a result we saw that his behavior changed and he got very good score in the both Courses. it wouldn't possible without money offer to my brother. Thus, based on this experience I think parent should encourage their children with prize or money.
Furthermore, offering money to children can be used as a tool for improving children's life skills. In fact, students can learn that with hard working they can achieve money and it develops their ability. Actually, with this strategy children can know that in the future they will get money for their attempt and effort. For instance, ten years ago when I was in high school, I was distracted by other activities and my grades were low. Although my parent had a rough time, they gave me money before my final tests and told me that we know you do your best and get a very good result. I decided to study hard to make them happy but the result was great not only in my final test even in my future life. offering money have changed my view and I became more responsible for my life. Thus, this is completely clear that our experience during school actually help us in the future.
In conclusion, I strongly feel that money can be a good stimulator for children to study well and parent should give money for high grades. This is because student can be more focused and because children learn how to get money for hard-working and effort.
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... get money for hard-working and effort.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
actually, but, furthermore, if, moreover, so, thus, well, for example, for instance, i feel, i think, in conclusion, in fact, no doubt, as a result, in my opinion, to begin with
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 18.0 13.1623246493 137% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 13.0 7.85571142285 165% => OK
Conjunction : 19.0 10.4138276553 182% => OK
Relative clauses : 11.0 7.30460921844 151% => OK
Pronoun: 66.0 24.0651302605 274% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 37.0 41.998997996 88% => OK
Nominalization: 4.0 8.3376753507 48% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1857.0 1615.20841683 115% => OK
No of words: 408.0 315.596192385 129% => OK
Chars per words: 4.55147058824 5.12529762239 89% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.49433085973 4.20363070211 107% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.32414853793 2.80592935109 83% => OK
Unique words: 201.0 176.041082164 114% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.492647058824 0.561755894193 88% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 567.9 506.74238477 112% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.4 1.60771543086 87% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 13.0 5.43587174349 239% => Less pronouns wanted as sentence beginning.
Article: 0.0 2.52805611222 0% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 2.10420841683 95% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 0.809619238477 0% => OK
Preposition: 5.0 4.76152304609 105% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 21.0 16.0721442886 131% => OK
Sentence length: 19.0 20.2975951904 94% => OK
Sentence length SD: 27.0641297695 49.4020404114 55% => The essay contains lots of sentences with the similar length. More sentence varieties wanted.
Chars per sentence: 88.4285714286 106.682146367 83% => OK
Words per sentence: 19.4285714286 20.7667163134 94% => OK
Discourse Markers: 8.42857142857 7.06120827912 119% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 6.0 5.01903807615 120% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 16.0 8.67935871743 184% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 2.0 3.9879759519 50% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 3.0 3.4128256513 88% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.299394534739 0.244688304435 122% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.100515051628 0.084324248473 119% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0600394783519 0.0667982634062 90% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.202405592428 0.151304729494 134% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0344503989647 0.056905535591 61% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 9.7 13.0946893788 74% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 69.11 50.2224549098 138% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 7.44779559118 42% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 8.3 11.3001002004 73% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 9.11 12.4159519038 73% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.21 8.58950901804 84% => OK
difficult_words: 68.0 78.4519038076 87% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 11.0 9.78957915832 112% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.6 10.1190380762 95% => OK
text_standard: 10.0 10.7795591182 93% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 56.1797752809 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 5.0 Out of 9
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