There are several factors which can affect people's decision-making; one of these factors is the dependency on parents. When it comes to this issue some people believe that parents had more impact on children to make up their mind in the past than what they have these days, while others disagree with that point of view. Although it seems plausible at first glimpse that the second idea carries more weight, I would counter it due to some reasons. I will enlarge on what I mean in the following paragraphs.
First and foremost, the unprecedented burgeoning of technology in recent decades thoroughly affect people's manner of decision-making. To be more exact, people relied on their parents or older people in the past to make the best choice since they had more experience and knew the distinctive aspects of every task. However, in the fast-paced life of today, the exponentially-growing internet makes information exchange rate reach a level more advanced than ever before, thus people can have access to a considerable amount of information. Therefore, young members of community suppose that there is no longer need to parents' experience and they can make up their mind on their own.
The second reason which deserves some words here lies in the fact that people can examine the situations very well these days to select the best option since there are a number of educational places everywhere. To clarify this point, the number of literal people raises rapidly during the last decade, and it is simpler for educated people to make up their minds individually. I have to admit that my opinion on this matter is profoundly influenced by my own experience. My father often remembers my grandfather who did not take part in school, so he saw his parents as those who were always there to help him opt the best solution for dissimilar problem. While my older brother who studied chemical engineering in Tarbiat Modaress University always tries to find the best method to cope with life's difficulties. As a result, people can determine their way of life nowadays superior to those who lived in the past.
To sum up, given the facts that technology lets people choose their own way of life and educated people can deal with unlike conditions due to their knowledge, I am of the opinion that young people are less dependent on their parents to select the best decision for themselves.
Grammar and spelling errors:
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Message: “While” at the beginning of a sentence requires a 2nd clause. Maybe a comma, question or exclamation mark is missing, or the sentence is incomplete and should be joined with the following sentence.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
first, however, if, second, so, therefore, thus, well, while, i mean, as a result, to sum up
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 9.0 15.1003584229 60% => More to be verbs wanted.
Auxiliary verbs: 9.0 9.8082437276 92% => OK
Conjunction : 6.0 13.8261648746 43% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 15.0 11.0286738351 136% => OK
Pronoun: 46.0 43.0788530466 107% => OK
Preposition: 63.0 52.1666666667 121% => OK
Nominalization: 6.0 8.0752688172 74% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1983.0 1977.66487455 100% => OK
No of words: 404.0 407.700716846 99% => OK
Chars per words: 4.90841584158 4.8611393121 101% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.48327461151 4.48103885553 100% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.7630980905 2.67179642975 103% => OK
Unique words: 221.0 212.727598566 104% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.54702970297 0.524837075471 104% => OK
syllable_count: 629.1 618.680645161 102% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.51630824373 106% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 5.0 9.59856630824 52% => OK
Article: 4.0 3.08781362007 130% => OK
Subordination: 5.0 3.51792114695 142% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 1.86738351254 54% => OK
Preposition: 4.0 4.94265232975 81% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 15.0 20.6003584229 73% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 26.0 20.1344086022 129% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 54.8251361654 48.9658058833 112% => OK
Chars per sentence: 132.2 100.406767564 132% => OK
Words per sentence: 26.9333333333 20.6045352989 131% => OK
Discourse Markers: 6.13333333333 5.45110844103 113% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 5.5376344086 18% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 9.0 11.8709677419 76% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 2.0 3.85842293907 52% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 4.0 4.88709677419 82% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.324117502571 0.236089414692 137% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.105712005832 0.076458572812 138% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0839094587825 0.0737576698707 114% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.218550485658 0.150856017488 145% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0666290822353 0.0645574589148 103% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 15.2 11.7677419355 129% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 45.09 58.1214874552 78% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 13.4 10.1575268817 132% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.49 10.9000537634 105% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.52 8.01818996416 106% => OK
difficult_words: 92.0 86.8835125448 106% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 11.0 10.002688172 110% => OK
gunning_fog: 12.4 10.0537634409 123% => OK
text_standard: 11.0 10.247311828 107% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 76.6666666667 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 23.0 Out of 30
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