The political leaders play a vital role in society. They are the ones who lead the society and set an example for the rest. They have such powers that they can dispense information regarding pressing issues at their discretion or not. In a few cases, information can be kept secret for the sake of the whole. However, in a majority of cases, politicians should be obliged to disclose information to the public.
Granted, in some cases, political leaders cannot help but withhold information from the public for the benefit of the citizens. One of such cases is that it is inevitable for political leaders to mask certain details about the proceeding of their strategic plans. Take an example of Osama Bin Laden, who had been one of the pioneers of Al-Qaeda, which had initiated the September 11 terrorist attacks. Since the terrible attacks that took away so many innocent lives, he had been hiding from the U.S. government. Progress in capturing bin Laden may have been hampered and plans may not have gone well accordingly if the government had disclosed information about his whereabouts or the ways it had employed to capture him. By hiding such details from the public, the United States was able to arrest him and his followers so that citizens would not be at further risk. Thus, withholding information can prove desirable in a few circumstances.
Regardless of the previous case, political leaders need to reveal information because the public has a right to be fully informed, particularly when it comes to health issues. For example, in 2003, SARS which is a respiratory disease in humans outbroke in China. The epidemic of SARS appears to have started in Guangdong Province, China. It has been remembered as one example of government and the relevant authority’s failures to take appropriate measures to prevent the disease from spreading out, and thus yield a disastrous result to take a toll on many lives. The Chinese government purposely did not inform the World Health Organization of the outbreak until the extent of patients contracting the disease went so enormous that the officials could not hide it. This lack of openness caused delays in efforts to control the epidemic in time, thus resulting in SARS spreading from the Guangdong province to rapidly infect individuals in some 37 countries around the world. When people’s lives are at stake, even a small piece of information should be disclosed to the public.
In summary, it is essential for political leaders to disclose information to the public since citizens have the right to know. Some may argue that a certain type of information needs to be kept secretly. Even though there exists some cases obviously that it might apply to, divulging information is one of the prioritized tasks political leaders should assume for the public to be fully informed.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
accordingly, but, however, if, may, regarding, so, thus, well, for example, in summary, in some cases
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 19.0 19.5258426966 97% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 14.0 12.4196629213 113% => OK
Conjunction : 8.0 14.8657303371 54% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 13.0 11.3162921348 115% => OK
Pronoun: 25.0 33.0505617978 76% => OK
Preposition: 71.0 58.6224719101 121% => OK
Nominalization: 16.0 12.9106741573 124% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2376.0 2235.4752809 106% => OK
No of words: 473.0 442.535393258 107% => OK
Chars per words: 5.02325581395 5.05705443957 99% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.66353547975 4.55969084622 102% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.79873913491 2.79657885939 100% => OK
Unique words: 242.0 215.323595506 112% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.511627906977 0.4932671777 104% => OK
syllable_count: 747.0 704.065955056 106% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.59117977528 101% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 6.0 6.24550561798 96% => OK
Article: 4.0 4.99550561798 80% => OK
Subordination: 3.0 3.10617977528 97% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 1.77640449438 56% => OK
Preposition: 7.0 4.38483146067 160% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 22.0 20.2370786517 109% => OK
Sentence length: 21.0 23.0359550562 91% => OK
Sentence length SD: 52.3183397833 60.3974514979 87% => OK
Chars per sentence: 108.0 118.986275619 91% => OK
Words per sentence: 21.5 23.4991977007 91% => OK
Discourse Markers: 4.59090909091 5.21951772744 88% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.97078651685 80% => OK
Language errors: 6.0 7.80617977528 77% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 7.0 10.2758426966 68% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 5.0 5.13820224719 97% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 10.0 4.83258426966 207% => Less facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.332845812703 0.243740707755 137% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.103439534054 0.0831039109588 124% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0989301760484 0.0758088955206 130% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.225140661733 0.150359130593 150% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0846252546276 0.0667264976115 127% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 13.0 14.1392134831 92% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 50.16 48.8420337079 103% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.92365168539 111% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.5 12.1743820225 94% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.84 12.1639044944 97% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.72 8.38706741573 104% => OK
difficult_words: 121.0 100.480337079 120% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 7.5 11.8971910112 63% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.4 11.2143820225 93% => OK
text_standard: 12.0 11.7820224719 102% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5/6 paragraphs with 3/4 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: reason 4. address both of the views presented for reason 4 (optional)
para 6: conclusion.
Rates: 75.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 4.5 Out of 6
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