Some people believe that our ever-increasing use of technology significantly reduces our opportunities for human interaction. Other people believe that technology provides us with new and better ways to communicate and connect with one another.
Write a response in which you discuss which view more closely aligns with your own position and explain your reasoning for the position you take. In developing and supporting your position, you should address both of the views presented.
Technology has been our day-to-day part of your life, the involvement of people with new technology that emerge is inevitable. The above topic is highly contentious as different people might have different opinion with it. Personally, I agree with the second half of the given topic in high extent. To hold my opinion, three different scenario are explained.
To begin with, With the increase in use of technology, we become more attached to it and we tend to involve more on virtual world rather than being more present in the outside world. For example, Dota 2 is one of the widely popular game, in countries like china and korea, Gamers are so attached to it that they forget the real world and live their life by the character inside the game. There has been several news in recent years about people being dead while playing games. In addition, Black Mirror, A Netflix Sci-Fi series which is based on technology and its consequences in the future has one episode where gamer dies inside the game being trapped by the virtual world.
However, Technology is more than just virtual world, It allow us to share information, communicate with people from distanced places and It is innovating the generation by disruption of exciting technology that are meant to help people in real world. There are many technologies that are helping us to communicate at work, home and different places. For instance, Slack is an application made for communication between team members of the company to communicate and share information. With its use people become more productive at work, and often more likely to work from anyplace while enjoying their real life. Thus, It implies that technology allow us with new and better ways to communicate.
Additionally, With the augmentation in usage of technology, The information in the world about different topics can be accessed easily by internet. People can even get education degree by learning online in the internet. For instance, In most of the software development and programming field, People do their learning from internet and can easily get an decent job that would require college degree otherwise, With the advent of new technologies, The way people do their work, complete their education, distance communication, find information etc. has been shifting the world further into more digital and easier life style of people.
In Sum, It is true that technology significantly reduces the human interaction by being more involved in virtual world. However, It also provide us opportunity to communicate and interact with each other in a better and evolving way.
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 336, Rule ID: CD_NN[1]
Message: Possible agreement error. The noun 'scenario' seems to be countable, so consider using: 'scenarios'.
Suggestion: scenarios
...nt. To hold my opinion, three different scenario are explained. To begin with, With t...
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Line 3, column 404, Rule ID: MANY_NN_U[8]
Message: Possible agreement error. The noun news seems to be uncountable; consider using: 'some news'.
Suggestion: some news
...aracter inside the game. There has been several news in recent years about people being dead...
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Line 5, column 57, Rule ID: IT_VBZ[1]
Message: Did you mean 'allows'?
Suggestion: allows
...ogy is more than just virtual world, It allow us to share information, communicate wi...
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Line 7, column 353, Rule ID: EN_A_VS_AN
Message: Use 'a' instead of 'an' if the following word doesn't start with a vowel sound, e.g. 'a sentence', 'a university'
Suggestion: a
...arning from internet and can easily get an decent job that would require college d...
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Line 9, column 138, Rule ID: IT_VBZ[1]
Message: Did you mean 'provides'?
Suggestion: provides
...lved in virtual world. However, It also provide us opportunity to communicate and inter...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, however, if, second, so, thus, while, for example, for instance, in addition, it is true, to begin with
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 21.0 19.5258426966 108% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 5.0 12.4196629213 40% => OK
Conjunction : 14.0 14.8657303371 94% => OK
Relative clauses : 9.0 11.3162921348 80% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 33.0 33.0505617978 100% => OK
Preposition: 72.0 58.6224719101 123% => OK
Nominalization: 19.0 12.9106741573 147% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2190.0 2235.4752809 98% => OK
No of words: 429.0 442.535393258 97% => OK
Chars per words: 5.1048951049 5.05705443957 101% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.55107846309 4.55969084622 100% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.77477802176 2.79657885939 99% => OK
Unique words: 226.0 215.323595506 105% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.526806526807 0.4932671777 107% => OK
syllable_count: 705.6 704.065955056 100% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.59117977528 101% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 6.0 6.24550561798 96% => OK
Article: 5.0 4.99550561798 100% => OK
Subordination: 0.0 3.10617977528 0% => More adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 1.0 1.77640449438 56% => OK
Preposition: 10.0 4.38483146067 228% => Less preposition wanted as sentence beginnings.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 19.0 20.2370786517 94% => OK
Sentence length: 22.0 23.0359550562 96% => OK
Sentence length SD: 67.3888949152 60.3974514979 112% => OK
Chars per sentence: 115.263157895 118.986275619 97% => OK
Words per sentence: 22.5789473684 23.4991977007 96% => OK
Discourse Markers: 5.73684210526 5.21951772744 110% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.97078651685 101% => OK
Language errors: 5.0 7.80617977528 64% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 13.0 10.2758426966 127% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 3.0 5.13820224719 58% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 3.0 4.83258426966 62% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.318471851771 0.243740707755 131% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.101240750756 0.0831039109588 122% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0782900313821 0.0758088955206 103% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.187436909923 0.150359130593 125% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0732378924881 0.0667264976115 110% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 13.9 14.1392134831 98% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 49.15 48.8420337079 101% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.92365168539 111% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.9 12.1743820225 98% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.6 12.1639044944 104% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.45 8.38706741573 101% => OK
difficult_words: 101.0 100.480337079 101% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 8.5 11.8971910112 71% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.8 11.2143820225 96% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 11.7820224719 76% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 50.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 3.0 Out of 6
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Note: the e-grader does NOT examine the meaning of words and ideas. VIP users will receive further evaluations by advanced module of e-grader and human graders.