132. Some people believe that our ever-increasing use of technology significantly reduces our opportunities for human interaction. Other people believe that technology provides us with new and better ways to communicate and connect with one another.Write

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132. Some people believe that our ever-increasing use of technology significantly reduces our opportunities for human interaction. Other people believe that technology provides us with new and better ways to communicate and connect with one another.

Write a response in which you discuss which view more closely aligns with your own position and explain your reasoning for the position you take. In developing and supporting your position, you should address both of the views presented.

Modern technology is developing in a unprecedented pace and promoted our options to communicate with each other. Through all these incredible technologies we were able to interact in ways that we have never could have imagined, and form a globalized world. Nevertheless, the quality of communication is corrupted by all these intermediate devices compared to the past.

Admittedly, the overall number of human interactions is facilitated by current communication technology. People around the world ceaselessly communicates by using Facebook, Twitter or Instagram even if they are total strangers to each other. Furthermore, with these technologies we are able to make spontaneous face calls to families that are living abroad or the media can broadcast the Olympics to the world in 3D by using modern communication systems. Not to mention instant messaging between your pears and colleagues. All these paramount inventions were something we could not imagine in the past, and thus is lucid that it is making ourselves more interconnected to each other.

Furthermore, with the development of communication skills the earth was able to become globalized. Through the internet representatives are able to have meetings without having to allocate a prolonged time to attend the conventions which sometimes ends without any advancements. Also, students who are studying around can keep in touch with their families simply by using their phones. Also, people can now experience foreign countries even if they do not travel their by using VR technology: companies like Oculus is trying to promote this type of traveling media since many people who are not able to travel are expecting these contents. Hence, through these innovations we are able to live a globalized society.

In contrast, even if these technologies enabled us to participate in numerous interactions, it seems that the quality of it has been deteriorated. Before the invention of cellphones, people would send letters that were thought out and sincere to keep in touch which is more intimate compared to just sending a message in Kakao-Talk. Moreover, because people are engaged in online communication, it distracts them from real face to face meetings: they keep looking on their phones and check messages instead of becoming immersed in the conversation. Therefore, the development of technology is the foundation of the wide and shallow relationship between people of the modern society.

In conclusion, modern communication devices such as mobile phones have empowered us to be in contact in any situation, and thus gifted us with globalization. Still, the gift has come with a price that we are paying by the superficial relationships.

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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 36, Rule ID: EN_A_VS_AN
Message: Use 'an' instead of 'a' if the following word starts with a vowel sound, e.g. 'an article', 'an hour'
Suggestion: an
Modern technology is developing in a unprecedented pace and promoted our opt...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, furthermore, hence, if, look, moreover, nevertheless, so, still, therefore, thus, in conclusion, in contrast, such as

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 24.0 19.5258426966 123% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 6.0 12.4196629213 48% => OK
Conjunction : 10.0 14.8657303371 67% => OK
Relative clauses : 10.0 11.3162921348 88% => OK
Pronoun: 38.0 33.0505617978 115% => OK
Preposition: 75.0 58.6224719101 128% => OK
Nominalization: 15.0 12.9106741573 116% => OK

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2303.0 2235.4752809 103% => OK
No of words: 424.0 442.535393258 96% => OK
Chars per words: 5.43160377358 5.05705443957 107% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.53775939005 4.55969084622 100% => OK
Word Length SD: 3.1870181003 2.79657885939 114% => OK
Unique words: 223.0 215.323595506 104% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.525943396226 0.4932671777 107% => OK
syllable_count: 733.5 704.065955056 104% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.7 1.59117977528 107% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 2.0 6.24550561798 32% => OK
Article: 4.0 4.99550561798 80% => OK
Subordination: 3.0 3.10617977528 97% => OK
Conjunction: 3.0 1.77640449438 169% => OK
Preposition: 8.0 4.38483146067 182% => OK

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 19.0 20.2370786517 94% => OK
Sentence length: 22.0 23.0359550562 96% => OK
Sentence length SD: 49.1644873298 60.3974514979 81% => OK
Chars per sentence: 121.210526316 118.986275619 102% => OK
Words per sentence: 22.3157894737 23.4991977007 95% => OK
Discourse Markers: 6.47368421053 5.21951772744 124% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.97078651685 101% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 7.80617977528 13% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 6.0 10.2758426966 58% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 0.0 5.13820224719 0% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 13.0 4.83258426966 269% => Less facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.197757855583 0.243740707755 81% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0625753116972 0.0831039109588 75% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0513867657116 0.0758088955206 68% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.114731792584 0.150359130593 76% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.024434210889 0.0667264976115 37% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 15.3 14.1392134831 108% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 40.69 48.8420337079 83% => OK
smog_index: 11.2 7.92365168539 141% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 13.1 12.1743820225 108% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 14.51 12.1639044944 119% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 9.08 8.38706741573 108% => OK
difficult_words: 117.0 100.480337079 116% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 11.5 11.8971910112 97% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.8 11.2143820225 96% => OK
text_standard: 11.0 11.7820224719 93% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Rates: 66.67 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 4.0 Out of 6
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