Some people believe that traveling to and living in numerous places increases one s ability to relate and connect to other people Others believe that this ability is better cultivated by living in one place and developing a deep understanding of that comm

Humans have always travelled across territories, acquiring new land and establishing new colonies. Personally, I feel, whether travelling and interacting with more people (quality) helps improve one's ability to connect to others, or whether staying fixed in a place and studying and building upon one's relationships (quality) with the community is the way to go about the task, depends wholly upon the extent and kind of connections with people one wishes to form. In particular, the ability to relate and connect with other people depends upon the people one might want to relate and connect with-- whether they would happen to be restricted to (or around) certain specific communities, or if the person's job requires them to travel and form relationships with people across the world.

Consider those anthropologists who need to study tribal behaviour. Knowledge about the culture of certain reclusive, xenophobic tribes in the Andamans or in the Amazons is virtually non-existent. Relating and connecting to them would be the ideal way to understand them better, and for this purpose, an anthropologist would need to integrate himself/herself into their society, perhaps over the course of years or decades. Only then would he/she finally manage to be able to grasp a hold of their exotic languages, traditions, and culture. Going about the task via any other means may in fact not be possible at all; being xenophobic, the tribes might simply shoot down inquisitive visitors they are not familiar with.

On the other hand, let's get back to the situation of the globalised/modernised world. Imagine a public relations officer working for a multinational company, say Amazon. To optimise sales strategies for places across the globe, it would be optimal if they, at various points of time in their lives, had lived in a variety of places and countries, and gotten to know the culture their. People in India happen to prefer to pay by cash, after a product has been delivered, while those in Western countries are glad to pay by card before receiving the product. To understand such differences in preferences across cultures, living amongst various peoples would be of great assistance.

Similarly, with politicians, diplomats, and traders having to interact with their counterparts from across the globe, it helps if they happen to have been avid travellers. Observing a variety of cultures would help inculate in them a respect for the diversity our planet carries. If they are able to interact with each other without prejudice and biases, it would assist efficient advancement of the world economy and society and avert communal crises and wars.

Well-travelled people, as a result of their experiences, would also better be able to understand the common thread that binds us as a species, abstracting out irrelevant differences which result in racism and prejudice. They could creatively combine solutions to social problems from all over the world. Laws could be made more progressive and accomodating. At the same time, we also need a certain subset of workers to understand each individual society intricately. Studies carried out in such detail could yield us hints about our own past, as is the case when tribal societies are studied. In essence, both, getting an overview of the world, and a detailed view of each society, are essential for the development of our race as a whole.

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Average: 8.3 (1 vote)
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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 194, Rule ID: ONES[1]
Message: Did you mean 'one's'?
Suggestion: one's
... with more people quality helps improve ones ability to connect to others, or whethe...
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Line 1, column 296, Rule ID: ONES[1]
Message: Did you mean 'one's'?
Suggestion: one's
... a place and studying and building upon ones relationships quality with the communit...
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Line 3, column 455, Rule ID: HE_VERB_AGR[3]
Message: The pronoun 'she' must be used with a third-person verb: 'manages'.
Suggestion: manages
...decades. Only then would he/she finally manage to be able to grasp a hold of their exo...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, finally, if, may, similarly, so, then, well, while, i feel, in fact, in particular, kind of, as a result, on the other hand

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 19.0 19.5258426966 97% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 18.0 12.4196629213 145% => OK
Conjunction : 26.0 14.8657303371 175% => OK
Relative clauses : 4.0 11.3162921348 35% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 34.0 33.0505617978 103% => OK
Preposition: 98.0 58.6224719101 167% => OK
Nominalization: 5.0 12.9106741573 39% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2851.0 2235.4752809 128% => OK
No of words: 551.0 442.535393258 125% => OK
Chars per words: 5.17422867514 5.05705443957 102% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.84493438435 4.55969084622 106% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.91966182119 2.79657885939 104% => OK
Unique words: 302.0 215.323595506 140% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.548094373866 0.4932671777 111% => OK
syllable_count: 885.6 704.065955056 126% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.59117977528 101% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 6.0 6.24550561798 96% => OK
Article: 3.0 4.99550561798 60% => OK
Subordination: 5.0 3.10617977528 161% => OK
Conjunction: 7.0 1.77640449438 394% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 9.0 4.38483146067 205% => Less preposition wanted as sentence beginnings.

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 22.0 20.2370786517 109% => OK
Sentence length: 25.0 23.0359550562 109% => OK
Sentence length SD: 76.5979090408 60.3974514979 127% => OK
Chars per sentence: 129.590909091 118.986275619 109% => OK
Words per sentence: 25.0454545455 23.4991977007 107% => OK
Discourse Markers: 5.86363636364 5.21951772744 112% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.97078651685 101% => OK
Language errors: 3.0 7.80617977528 38% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 14.0 10.2758426966 136% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 2.0 5.13820224719 39% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 6.0 4.83258426966 124% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.205739404449 0.243740707755 84% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0465270093623 0.0831039109588 56% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0637656954568 0.0758088955206 84% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.102796234645 0.150359130593 68% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.088192459025 0.0667264976115 132% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 15.4 14.1392134831 109% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 46.1 48.8420337079 94% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.92365168539 111% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 13.0 12.1743820225 107% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 13.0 12.1639044944 107% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 9.32 8.38706741573 111% => OK
difficult_words: 155.0 100.480337079 154% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 20.0 11.8971910112 168% => OK
gunning_fog: 12.0 11.2143820225 107% => OK
text_standard: 13.0 11.7820224719 110% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Rates: 83.33 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 5.0 Out of 6
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