Some young adults want independence from their parents as soon as possible. Other young adults prefer to live with their families for a longer time. Which of these situations do you think is better? Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer.
Becoming an adult is a really special time in anybody’s life and the call to head out into the world and embrace our independence is, for many people, quite powerful. I think this can depend on a lot of different factors; for example somebody starting a job might have different needs and priorities compared to a person who intends to go on and study at university. Generally speaking, I believe that it is better for all concerned young adults, continue to live with their families for a longer time, particularly if they are going to be studying at university or something similar.
First of all, it’s important to consider finances. Certainly, it is possible for some young adults to get work and support themselves relatively quickly. However, in most parts of the world these days it costs a lot to rent a house, attend university, buy a car or purchase things like health insurance. By way of example, I can recall trying to live independently outside the family home as a university student and I constantly struggled to pay the bills and meet all the other costs of living as a young adult. This, in turn, had an adverse effect on things like my study performance.
Hence, in addition to the importance of finances, I think this is better for a young adult’s study potential. With your family’s support, it is a lot easier to focus on your studies. Of course, for some people in some situation, the family situation may actually be quite distracting or stressful. However, I think it would be fair to say that(for most people) you are likely to eat better meals, have a quiet place to study and do school work and get a decent night sleep if you happen to be living in the family home. I can recall my friend from my university days who lived in a shared house with other students. Life was a party for him but he didn’t eat or study well and inevitably his grades suffered. He had to repeat several subjects and finished his degree later that many of his peers.
Finally, staying at home one’s parents doesn’t mean necessarily mean that a young adult can’t develop independence. I will be the first to admit that there are parents out there who struggle to acknowledge that their children have grown up and deserved treatment as an adult; it’s instinctive of them to continue to play a mothering role that can actually be quite stifling for a young adult. Despite this possibility, even though I spent most of my university days living with my parents, they respected me as an adult as well as their child and they didn’t attempt to interfere too much or limit my independence. I think this is the case for many other your people as well, so I don’t think it is necessarily fair to claim that, just because someone is lining with family, they are somehow unable to enjoy benefits of independence. In fact, I believe the safe environment of family abode is a good place to handle the transition to adulthood for all concerned, both the child and the parents.
By way of conclusion, based on the argument explored, I’m of the opinion that in most cases it’s actually more beneficial for most adults to continue living with their families for a longer period of time. Families are precious things and an essential part of the fabric of the nurturing society, So I have strong believe that they can be a powerful guide in helping children negotiate the path to independence.
Grammar and spelling errors:
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Suggestion: period
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
actually, but, finally, first, hence, however, if, may, really, so, well, for example, i think, in addition, in fact, of course, as well as, first of all, in most cases
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 23.0 19.5258426966 118% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 10.0 12.4196629213 81% => OK
Conjunction : 21.0 14.8657303371 141% => OK
Relative clauses : 12.0 11.3162921348 106% => OK
Pronoun: 64.0 33.0505617978 194% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 79.0 58.6224719101 135% => OK
Nominalization: 15.0 12.9106741573 116% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2855.0 2235.4752809 128% => OK
No of words: 600.0 442.535393258 136% => OK
Chars per words: 4.75833333333 5.05705443957 94% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.94923200384 4.55969084622 109% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.79741944577 2.79657885939 100% => OK
Unique words: 292.0 215.323595506 136% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.486666666667 0.4932671777 99% => OK
syllable_count: 911.7 704.065955056 129% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.59117977528 94% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 14.0 6.24550561798 224% => Less pronouns wanted as sentence beginning.
Article: 1.0 4.99550561798 20% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 3.10617977528 32% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 1.77640449438 0% => OK
Preposition: 9.0 4.38483146067 205% => Less preposition wanted as sentence beginnings.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 22.0 20.2370786517 109% => OK
Sentence length: 27.0 23.0359550562 117% => OK
Sentence length SD: 62.5005785097 60.3974514979 103% => OK
Chars per sentence: 129.772727273 118.986275619 109% => OK
Words per sentence: 27.2727272727 23.4991977007 116% => OK
Discourse Markers: 7.63636363636 5.21951772744 146% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.97078651685 101% => OK
Language errors: 2.0 7.80617977528 26% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 15.0 10.2758426966 146% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 3.0 5.13820224719 58% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 4.0 4.83258426966 83% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.313276471822 0.243740707755 129% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0928678783352 0.0831039109588 112% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0686258680915 0.0758088955206 91% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.187406478178 0.150359130593 125% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0262706219029 0.0667264976115 39% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 14.6 14.1392134831 103% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 52.53 48.8420337079 108% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.92365168539 111% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 12.6 12.1743820225 103% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 10.62 12.1639044944 87% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.37 8.38706741573 100% => OK
difficult_words: 129.0 100.480337079 128% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 19.0 11.8971910112 160% => OK
gunning_fog: 12.8 11.2143820225 114% => OK
text_standard: 13.0 11.7820224719 110% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 66.67 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 4.0 Out of 6
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