The surest indicator of a great nation is represented not by the achievements of its rulers, artists, or scientists, but by the general welfare of its people.
Write a response in which you discuss the extent to which you agree or disagree with the statement and explain your reasoning for the position you take. In developing and supporting your position, you should consider ways in which the statement might or might not hold true and explain how these considerations shape your position.
The topic states that the best indicator of a great nation is the general welfare of its people and not the achievements of its rulers, artists or scientists. I believe this is true, because a nation is made up by its people, and it is illogical to base a country’s greatness to a single person or the pioneers of the country.
Firstly, when is a nation considered to be ‘great’? Is it when they’ve made a mark on the history or when the people of the nation have the basic human necessities? For instance, Finland is a country in the Scandinavian region of Northern Europe and it is considered to be the happiest country in the world. One of the major reasons: they came up with a pragmatic solution for homelessness, something that has been haunting the United States for the recent decades. The Finnish people alleviated this problem by satisfying the basic necessities first, like providing a housing first, then focusing on improving the livelihood of the person. The government also underwrites a small part of their rent for the first few months. On the contrary, to become a homeowner in United States, the individual has to prove to the government that he is fit for a house. This comes in the form of various tests and the bar to clear them is pretty high. Additionally, the Finnish infrastructure is in a league of its own, with free education and healthcare for everyone. Therefore, to reiterate my point, the morale of the general populace is one of the most distinct gauges to define the nation’s greatness.
However, is it the only way to gauge a country’s greatness? The pioneers of the country can also make it great by achieving feats that progressed whole of mankind. For instance, Germany is a country in Central Europe that has created scientists like Albert Einstein, hailed to be one of the greatest physicists of all time. His contribution to physics has leaded the people of every nation to have a better understanding on the concepts of quantum mechanics and theory of relativity, which has helped the mankind in a lot of way: ranging from effectively utilizing solar energy to understanding the origins of the universe. If it weren’t for Einstein’s discoveries, we would have been on square one for our battle against climate change and wouldn’t have considered other planets to settle. But, the countries greatness is also diminished if the leaders of country are wicked. Using the previous example of Germany, it was also the country where the dictator Adolf Hitler rose to power and was the cause of The Holocaust, which has been black mark in the world history. In addition to that, he was one of the reasons for the rise of World War 2, a war that caused great suffering all over the world. Thousands were stripped from their livelihoods and millions were robbed of their lives. Hence, leaders can also diminish the country’s greatness.
To recapitulate, a nation’s greatness depends on the welfare of the people and not the pioneers of the country. While the pioneers do help in the advancement of the human population, it is fallacious to assume that that alone makes a country great. All countries have exceptional people but to base the countries greatness to them alone is unjustifiable.
Grammar and spelling errors:
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Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...person or the pioneers of the country. Firstly, when is a nation considered to ...
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Message: Use simply 'necessities'.
Suggestion: necessities
...leviated this problem by satisfying the basic necessities first, like providing a housing first, ...
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Message: Possible typo: apostrophe is missing. Did you mean 'countries'' or 'country's'?
Suggestion: countries'; country's
...dered other planets to settle. But, the countries greatness is also diminished if the lea...
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Message: Possible typo: apostrophe is missing. Did you mean 'countries'' or 'country's'?
Suggestion: countries'; country's
...have exceptional people but to base the countries greatness to them alone is unjustifiabl...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, first, firstly, hence, however, if, so, then, therefore, while, as to, for instance, in addition, on the contrary
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 29.0 19.5258426966 149% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 3.0 12.4196629213 24% => OK
Conjunction : 14.0 14.8657303371 94% => OK
Relative clauses : 15.0 11.3162921348 133% => OK
Pronoun: 38.0 33.0505617978 115% => OK
Preposition: 81.0 58.6224719101 138% => OK
Nominalization: 10.0 12.9106741573 77% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2703.0 2235.4752809 121% => OK
No of words: 555.0 442.535393258 125% => OK
Chars per words: 4.87027027027 5.05705443957 96% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.85370353223 4.55969084622 106% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.89226177085 2.79657885939 103% => OK
Unique words: 262.0 215.323595506 122% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.472072072072 0.4932671777 96% => OK
syllable_count: 835.2 704.065955056 119% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.59117977528 94% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 7.0 6.24550561798 112% => OK
Article: 10.0 4.99550561798 200% => Less articles wanted as sentence beginning.
Subordination: 4.0 3.10617977528 129% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 1.77640449438 56% => OK
Preposition: 7.0 4.38483146067 160% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 25.0 20.2370786517 124% => OK
Sentence length: 22.0 23.0359550562 96% => OK
Sentence length SD: 51.4262812188 60.3974514979 85% => OK
Chars per sentence: 108.12 118.986275619 91% => OK
Words per sentence: 22.2 23.4991977007 94% => OK
Discourse Markers: 4.96 5.21951772744 95% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.97078651685 80% => OK
Language errors: 4.0 7.80617977528 51% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 13.0 10.2758426966 127% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 4.0 5.13820224719 78% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 8.0 4.83258426966 166% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.16399770118 0.243740707755 67% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0504009501429 0.0831039109588 61% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0725510282364 0.0758088955206 96% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.13311362195 0.150359130593 89% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0892316754514 0.0667264976115 134% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 12.6 14.1392134831 89% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 57.61 48.8420337079 118% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.92365168539 111% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 10.7 12.1743820225 88% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 10.97 12.1639044944 90% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.65 8.38706741573 103% => OK
difficult_words: 138.0 100.480337079 137% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 11.0 11.8971910112 92% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.8 11.2143820225 96% => OK
text_standard: 11.0 11.7820224719 93% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5/6 paragraphs with 3/4 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: reason 4. address both of the views presented for reason 4 (optional)
para 6: conclusion.
Rates: 62.5 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 3.75 Out of 6
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Note: the e-grader does NOT examine the meaning of words and ideas. VIP users will receive further evaluations by advanced module of e-grader and human graders.