The surest indicator of a great nation is represented not by the achievements of its rulers, artists, or scientists, but by the general welfare of its people.

There are several indicators for measuring the greatness of nations and each indicator cannot measure all aspects of the greatness. Therefore, choosing the suitable indicator mainly depends on the definition of the greatness and there is not a certain indicator that can determine a great nation.

If one interprets that the great nation should offer as much happiness as possible to its people, the surest indicator for the greatness measurement is probably the welfare of all people. If the nation can provide satisfied amount of food, clothes, medicine and required facilities to its people, the people will have a high quality of life and certainly have a lot of happiness. In this case, the achievements of its rulers, artist or scientists may be minor indicators. The nation may not have the best ruler. It may have no priceless artworks from the artists and no advanced scientific achievement. On the other hand, the nation has abundant natural resources such as food, rare minerals, oil and gas. These resources can provide the nation and its people a lot of income and those people will certainly be able to purchase anything they want. When we use the welfare of people as an indicator for the greatness of this country, this country will be a great nation in term of people’s happiness regardless of its rulers, artists, or scientist.

In contrast, if one implies the greatness of nations as an ability to contribute a great impact to all other nations, the achievements of its rulers, artists, and scientists can be the surest indicator for the measurement of the greatness. Great rulers can make change to other nations by several ways. For example, they may acquire the neighbor’s territories by military or diplomacy methods. These rulers can also convince the other nations to change their political policy. We can see the ability of the previous Soviet Union’s leaders that can change the surrounding countries to communism and make the Soviet Union a great nation at that time. Great scientists can invent new technology to their nations and also the other nations around the world. Thomas Edison created many novel electrical devices such as light bulbs and radios. These devices could be sold to all nations around the world and made the United State a great country. Therefore, the achievement of the rulers, artists and scientists is one of the best indicators if we think that the great nations have to make a significant impact to the world.

In conclusion, the surest indicator for great nation depends on the definition of the greatness. As long as there are many possible definitions, the indicator can be varied from one to one.

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...ndicator can be varied from one to one.
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Discourse Markers used:
['also', 'but', 'if', 'may', 'so', 'therefore', 'for example', 'in conclusion', 'in contrast', 'such as', 'on the other hand']

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance in Part of Speech:
Nouns: 0.276 0.240241500013 115% => OK
Verbs: 0.096 0.157235817809 61% => OK
Adjectives: 0.098 0.0880659088768 111% => OK
Adverbs: 0.028 0.0497285424764 56% => OK
Pronouns: 0.028 0.0444667217837 63% => OK
Prepositions: 0.106 0.12292977631 86% => OK
Participles: 0.012 0.0406280797675 30% => Some participles wanted.
Conjunctions: 2.77413394232 2.79330140395 99% => OK
Infinitives: 0.026 0.030933414821 84% => OK
Particles: 0.0 0.0016655270985 0% => OK
Determiners: 0.142 0.0997080785238 142% => OK
Modal_auxiliary: 0.04 0.0249443105267 160% => OK
WH_determiners: 0.006 0.0148568991511 40% => Some subClauses wanted starting by 'Which, Who, What, Whom, Whose.....'

Vocabulary words and sentences:
No of characters: 2689.0 2732.02544248 98% => OK
No of words: 444.0 452.878318584 98% => OK
Chars per words: 6.05630630631 6.0361032391 100% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.5903493882 4.58838876751 100% => OK
words length more than 5 chars: 0.385135135135 0.366273622748 105% => OK
words length more than 6 chars: 0.295045045045 0.280924506359 105% => OK
words length more than 7 chars: 0.20045045045 0.200843997647 100% => OK
words length more than 8 chars: 0.148648648649 0.132149295362 112% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.77413394232 2.79330140395 99% => OK
Unique words: 186.0 219.290929204 85% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.418918918919 0.48968727796 86% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
Word variations: 45.6879147428 55.4138127331 82% => OK
How many sentences: 21.0 20.6194690265 102% => OK
Sentence length: 21.1428571429 23.380412469 90% => OK
Sentence length SD: 51.7019629272 59.4972553346 87% => OK
Chars per sentence: 128.047619048 141.124799967 91% => OK
Words per sentence: 21.1428571429 23.380412469 90% => OK
Discourse Markers: 0.52380952381 0.674092028746 78% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.94800884956 81% => OK
Language errors: 2.0 5.21349557522 38% => OK
Readability: 50.6473616474 51.4728631049 98% => OK
Elegance: 2.59210526316 1.64882698954 157% => OK

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.561055039162 0.391690518653 143% => OK
Sentence sentence coherence: 0.155474313049 0.123202303941 126% => OK
Sentence sentence coherence SD: 0.0927655281839 0.077325440228 120% => OK
Sentence paragraph coherence: 0.565089107895 0.547984918172 103% => OK
Sentence paragraph coherence SD: 0.187705011017 0.149214159877 126% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.236276289317 0.161403998019 146% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.132962476457 0.0892212321368 149% => OK
Paragraph paragraph coherence: 0.495992204498 0.385218514788 129% => OK
Paragraph paragraph coherence SD: 0.0459667347139 0.0692045440612 66% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.404434440892 0.275328986314 147% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.092481455363 0.0653680567796 141% => OK

Task Achievement:
Sentences with positive sentiment : 15.0 10.4325221239 144% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 2.0 5.30420353982 38% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 4.0 4.88274336283 82% => OK
Positive topic words: 15.0 7.22455752212 208% => OK
Negative topic words: 2.0 3.66592920354 55% => OK
Neutral topic words: 4.0 2.70907079646 148% => OK
Total topic words: 21.0 13.5995575221 154% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

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Rates: 50.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 3.0 Out of 6
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flaws:
In GRE, better to always support only one side since it is hard to argue well for both side in 30 minutes. and better to have 5 paragraphs. Try this pattern:

paragraph 1: introduction. Suppose we support side A.

paragraph 2: reason 1 + why reason 1 + example of reason 1 + a small conclusion (like advantages of reason 1 or comparisons if not reason 1).

paragraph 3: reason 2 + why reason 2 + example of reason 2 + a small conclusion (like advantages of reason 2 or comparisons if not reason 2).

paragraph 4: Admittedly, there are some advantages of side B. First, ... Second, .... However, there is no causation/relation.... I still support side A. first,....second...

paragraph 5: conclusion -- reinforce the thesis.

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Attribute Value Ideal
Final score: 3.0 out of 6
Category: Satisfactory Excellent
No. of Grammatical Errors: 0 2
No. of Spelling Errors: 0 2
No. of Sentences: 21 15
No. of Words: 444 350
No. of Characters: 2167 1500
No. of Different Words: 181 200
Fourth Root of Number of Words: 4.59 4.7
Average Word Length: 4.881 4.6
Word Length SD: 2.621 2.4
No. of Words greater than 5 chars: 168 100
No. of Words greater than 6 chars: 121 80
No. of Words greater than 7 chars: 80 40
No. of Words greater than 8 chars: 62 20
Use of Passive Voice (%): 0 0
Avg. Sentence Length: 21.143 21.0
Sentence Length SD: 8.866 7.5
Use of Discourse Markers (%): 0.667 0.12
Sentence-Text Coherence: 0.338 0.35
Sentence-Para Coherence: 0.5 0.50
Sentence-Sentence Coherence: 0.136 0.07
Number of Paragraphs: 4 5