The surest indicator of a great nation is represented not by the achievements of its rulers, artists, or scientists, but by the general welfare of its people.
Write a response in which you discuss the extent to which you agree or disagree with the statement and explain your reasoning for the position you take. In developing and supporting your position, you should consider ways in which the statement might or might not hold true and explain how these considerations shape your position.
especially in our time, what determines the greatness of a nation is rather to be situated in international recognition and interpretation. While well-being of its people and keeping them content is an irrefutable condition of maintaining a country, it is not sufficient to achieve leading reputation within the international community. In that respect, it’s the pioneering few with outstanding talent who earns the nation unmistakable distinction and in turn establish a firm foundation for the nation to prosper.
Historically, a country’s wax and wane have been determined by how to manage its people satisfied and therefore amenable. discontented mass sometimes rises to subvert the government, hamper policy-making process or bring division across the nation. consider Free Trade agreement in 2010 in Korea, where the public displayed great anxiety towards what is imported with softer regulations, and the government as well failed in transparently making public the items to be imported and persuading people with underpinning explanation of the beneficial aspect of the agreement. As the public sentiments exacerbated, a series of demonstration mounted where the police and the public confronted with violence, causing a significant delay in concluding the agreement.
Despite the fact that great discontent of the people causes a state-level dishonour and further derogation of the nation's external reputation, the opposite end of public sentiments doesn’t always earn it a sterling label for a great nation. rather, based on the well managed being of the people, becoming a great nation has been a matter of interrelationship between other nations. it has been a relatively few people who succeeded in bringing recognisable reputation by winning prestigious prizes in their field, bringing about prescient policies or taking part at authoritative award ceremony. In the politic sector especially, ironically it’s a few seasoned officials who sense public sentiments and have authority to establish adequate policies. Accumulation of thoughtfully considered economic policies can even lead the country into the G20 line-up, which is the most evident and objective indicator of a nation’s splendor. In private sector, as Samsung semiconductor department well illustrates, often it’s the few talented individuals in researching force whose contribution becomes a useful intellectual asset that will be the core force in developing new products and in turn bring the nation billions of profit.
Summing it up, it is irrefutable that the basic requirement of being a great nation is to manage its people’s well-being by making them content, and that its disturbance may cause the nation in a precarious state. Nonetheless, in our time where a status of a nation is assessed in an international manner, it’s the contribution of those few people working in their own fields that becomes the main driving force to move the country forward.
Grammar and spelling errors:
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...nterrelationship between other nations. it has been a relatively few people who su...
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Message: Consider replacing "in an international manner" with adverb for "international"; eg, "in a hasty manner" with "hastily".
... where a status of a nation is assessed in an international manner, it's the contribution of those fe...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, if, may, nonetheless, so, therefore, well, while
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 18.0 19.5258426966 92% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 3.0 12.4196629213 24% => OK
Conjunction : 15.0 14.8657303371 101% => OK
Relative clauses : 14.0 11.3162921348 124% => OK
Pronoun: 24.0 33.0505617978 73% => OK
Preposition: 63.0 58.6224719101 107% => OK
Nominalization: 23.0 12.9106741573 178% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2542.0 2235.4752809 114% => OK
No of words: 451.0 442.535393258 102% => OK
Chars per words: 5.63636363636 5.05705443957 111% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.60833598836 4.55969084622 101% => OK
Word Length SD: 3.33420997547 2.79657885939 119% => OK
Unique words: 250.0 215.323595506 116% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.554323725055 0.4932671777 112% => OK
syllable_count: 793.8 704.065955056 113% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.8 1.59117977528 113% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 3.0 6.24550561798 48% => OK
Article: 3.0 4.99550561798 60% => OK
Subordination: 3.0 3.10617977528 97% => OK
Conjunction: 2.0 1.77640449438 113% => OK
Preposition: 5.0 4.38483146067 114% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 15.0 20.2370786517 74% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 30.0 23.0359550562 130% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 57.01438415 60.3974514979 94% => OK
Chars per sentence: 169.466666667 118.986275619 142% => OK
Words per sentence: 30.0666666667 23.4991977007 128% => OK
Discourse Markers: 3.53333333333 5.21951772744 68% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.97078651685 80% => OK
Language errors: 6.0 7.80617977528 77% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 10.0 10.2758426966 97% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 2.0 5.13820224719 39% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 3.0 4.83258426966 62% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.129228399985 0.243740707755 53% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0473712240997 0.0831039109588 57% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0343388154953 0.0758088955206 45% => Sentences are similar to each other.
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0874291629199 0.150359130593 58% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0151806691433 0.0667264976115 23% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 20.2 14.1392134831 143% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 24.11 48.8420337079 49% => Flesch_reading_ease is low.
smog_index: 13.0 7.92365168539 164% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 17.4 12.1743820225 143% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 16.02 12.1639044944 132% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 10.62 8.38706741573 127% => OK
difficult_words: 157.0 100.480337079 156% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 13.0 11.8971910112 109% => OK
gunning_fog: 14.0 11.2143820225 125% => OK
text_standard: 13.0 11.7820224719 110% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5/6 paragraphs with 3/4 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: reason 4. address both of the views presented for reason 4 (optional)
para 6: conclusion.
Rates: 66.67 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 4.0 Out of 6
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