Young people should be encouraged to pursue long-term, realistic goals rather than seek immediate fame and recognition.
Write a response in which you discuss the extent to which you agree or disagree with the recommendation and explain your reasoning for the position you take. In developing and supporting your position, describe specific circumstances in which adopting the recommendation would or would not be advantageous and explain how these examples shape your position.
Young people usually like to get famous immediately, but they should be encouraged to set up realistic goals because it is important for them to have long-term educational plans to have good jobs and consequently good lives in the future.
Long-term goals can be frustrating sometimes; however, the consequence will be worthy. For example, a young girl who wants to be a dietitian should study for four years to get a clinical nutrition bachelor. In addition, she should pass a ten months dietetic internship and the registered dietitian exam after that. It is obvious that she is going to have tight schedules. Moreover, she should study hard to reach her dreams. Consequently, she will become a RD even if the educational path was not that fun for her.
Additionally, young people are passionate about vacations that is not good all the times because they need to save money for unexpected expenses too. Imagine a same RD girl who has a fulltime job; however, she goes to expensive travels with her friends every year. As a result, she is going to have money problems soon. Instead of spending unnecessary money, she can save money to make sure that she can be an independent individual in her life that is more important than having entertainment.
On the contrary, most young individuals believe that they only born one time, so they should enjoy their moments; however, most of the time fame and recognition come quickly and disappear quickly too. For example, consider a young girl who likes to get famous among her friends by going to parties and dancing on the floor. As a result, she might get happy which is a good entertainment for her and her friends, but everybody is going to forget her eventually that is not going to be a beneficial goal for her.
In conclusion, long-term goals are beneficial because young individuals can stay on track and become successful persons one day. Immediate recognition is every young's dream; however, quick fame will vanish soon. To make improvements in our lives we need to have goals even if reaching them is going to take a long time.
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Essay evaluations by e-grader
Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, consequently, however, if, moreover, so, for example, in addition, in conclusion, as a result, on the contrary
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 20.0 19.5258426966 102% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 15.0 12.4196629213 121% => OK
Conjunction : 9.0 14.8657303371 61% => OK
Relative clauses : 12.0 11.3162921348 106% => OK
Pronoun: 37.0 33.0505617978 112% => OK
Preposition: 36.0 58.6224719101 61% => OK
Nominalization: 7.0 12.9106741573 54% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1730.0 2235.4752809 77% => OK
No of words: 358.0 442.535393258 81% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.83240223464 5.05705443957 96% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.34981470047 4.55969084622 95% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.75086771424 2.79657885939 98% => OK
Unique words: 183.0 215.323595506 85% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.511173184358 0.4932671777 104% => OK
syllable_count: 533.7 704.065955056 76% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.59117977528 94% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 8.0 6.24550561798 128% => OK
Article: 2.0 4.99550561798 40% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 3.10617977528 64% => OK
Conjunction: 2.0 1.77640449438 113% => OK
Preposition: 5.0 4.38483146067 114% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 17.0 20.2370786517 84% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 21.0 23.0359550562 91% => OK
Sentence length SD: 51.7265902453 60.3974514979 86% => OK
Chars per sentence: 101.764705882 118.986275619 86% => OK
Words per sentence: 21.0588235294 23.4991977007 90% => OK
Discourse Markers: 6.76470588235 5.21951772744 130% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.97078651685 101% => OK
Language errors: 0.0 7.80617977528 0% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 11.0 10.2758426966 107% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 2.0 5.13820224719 39% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 4.0 4.83258426966 83% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.182644395095 0.243740707755 75% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.061161502555 0.0831039109588 74% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0461682457161 0.0758088955206 61% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.116373543675 0.150359130593 77% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0366671438312 0.0667264976115 55% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 11.8 14.1392134831 83% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 58.62 48.8420337079 120% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.92365168539 111% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 10.3 12.1743820225 85% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 10.73 12.1639044944 88% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.59 8.38706741573 90% => OK
difficult_words: 66.0 100.480337079 66% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 11.0 11.8971910112 92% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.4 11.2143820225 93% => OK
text_standard: 11.0 11.7820224719 93% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 50.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 3.0 Out of 6
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Note: the e-grader does NOT examine the meaning of words and ideas. VIP users will receive further evaluations by advanced module of e-grader and human graders.
Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, consequently, however, if, moreover, so, for example, in addition, in conclusion, as a result, on the contrary
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 20.0 19.5258426966 102% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 15.0 12.4196629213 121% => OK
Conjunction : 9.0 14.8657303371 61% => OK
Relative clauses : 12.0 11.3162921348 106% => OK
Pronoun: 37.0 33.0505617978 112% => OK
Preposition: 36.0 58.6224719101 61% => OK
Nominalization: 7.0 12.9106741573 54% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1730.0 2235.4752809 77% => OK
No of words: 358.0 442.535393258 81% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.83240223464 5.05705443957 96% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.34981470047 4.55969084622 95% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.75086771424 2.79657885939 98% => OK
Unique words: 183.0 215.323595506 85% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.511173184358 0.4932671777 104% => OK
syllable_count: 533.7 704.065955056 76% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.59117977528 94% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 8.0 6.24550561798 128% => OK
Article: 2.0 4.99550561798 40% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 3.10617977528 64% => OK
Conjunction: 2.0 1.77640449438 113% => OK
Preposition: 5.0 4.38483146067 114% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 17.0 20.2370786517 84% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 21.0 23.0359550562 91% => OK
Sentence length SD: 51.7265902453 60.3974514979 86% => OK
Chars per sentence: 101.764705882 118.986275619 86% => OK
Words per sentence: 21.0588235294 23.4991977007 90% => OK
Discourse Markers: 6.76470588235 5.21951772744 130% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.97078651685 101% => OK
Language errors: 0.0 7.80617977528 0% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 11.0 10.2758426966 107% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 2.0 5.13820224719 39% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 4.0 4.83258426966 83% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.182644395095 0.243740707755 75% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.061161502555 0.0831039109588 74% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0461682457161 0.0758088955206 61% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.116373543675 0.150359130593 77% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0366671438312 0.0667264976115 55% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 11.8 14.1392134831 83% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 58.62 48.8420337079 120% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.92365168539 111% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 10.3 12.1743820225 85% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 10.73 12.1639044944 88% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.59 8.38706741573 90% => OK
difficult_words: 66.0 100.480337079 66% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 11.0 11.8971910112 92% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.4 11.2143820225 93% => OK
text_standard: 11.0 11.7820224719 93% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 50.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 3.0 Out of 6
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Note: the e-grader does NOT examine the meaning of words and ideas. VIP users will receive further evaluations by advanced module of e-grader and human graders.