Young people should be encouraged to pursue long-term, realistic goals rather than seek immediate fame and recognition.
Write a response in which you discuss the extent to which you agree or disagree with the recommendation and explain your reasoning for the position you take. In developing and supporting your position, describe specific circumstances in which adopting the recommendation would or would not be advantageous and explain how these examples shape your position.
The recommendation presents a view that I would agree is successful most of the time. Young people usually like to get famous immediately but they should be encouraged to set up realistic goals. Surely, it is important for young individuals to have long-term educational plans to have good jobs and consequently good lives in the future.
Achieving long-term goals can be frustrating sometimes; however, the consequence will be worthy. For example, a young girl who wants to be a dietitian should study for four years to get a clinical nutrition bachelor. Next, she should pass a ten months dietetic internship and the registered dietitian exam. It is obvious that she should study hard to reach her dreams. As a result, he will become an RD even if the educational path was not that fun for her.
Additionally, young people are passionate about vacations that is not good all the times because they need to save money for unexpected expenses, too. Imagine a same RD girl who has a fulltime job; however, she goes to expensive travels with her friends every year. As a result, she is going to have money problems soon. Instead of spending unnecessary money, she can save money to make sure that she can be an independent individual in her life that is more important than having entertainment.
In contrast to the statement, most young individuals believe that they only born one time, so they should enjoy their moments; however, most of the time fame and recognition come quickly and disappear rapidly, as well. For instance, consider a young girl who likes to get famous among her friends by going to parties and dancing on the floor. As a result, she might get happy which is a good entertainment for her and her friends but not a realistic goal. Whatever the reason behind the behavior, the key factor is that short-term goals are not beneficial for young individuals because quick entertainment can hinder reaching realistic goals.
In conclusion, immediate recognition is every young individual’s dream but to make improvements in their lives it is essential to have long-term goals to become successful persons one day.
Grammar and spelling errors:
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Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, consequently, however, if, so, well, for example, for instance, in conclusion, in contrast, as a result, in contrast to
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 18.0 19.5258426966 92% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 14.0 12.4196629213 113% => OK
Conjunction : 9.0 14.8657303371 61% => OK
Relative clauses : 12.0 11.3162921348 106% => OK
Pronoun: 33.0 33.0505617978 100% => OK
Preposition: 33.0 58.6224719101 56% => More preposition wanted.
Nominalization: 10.0 12.9106741573 77% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1776.0 2235.4752809 79% => OK
No of words: 358.0 442.535393258 81% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.96089385475 5.05705443957 98% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.34981470047 4.55969084622 95% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.87478347239 2.79657885939 103% => OK
Unique words: 188.0 215.323595506 87% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.525139664804 0.4932671777 106% => OK
syllable_count: 542.7 704.065955056 77% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.59117977528 94% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 8.0 6.24550561798 128% => OK
Article: 4.0 4.99550561798 80% => OK
Subordination: 4.0 3.10617977528 129% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 1.77640449438 0% => OK
Preposition: 3.0 4.38483146067 68% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 17.0 20.2370786517 84% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 21.0 23.0359550562 91% => OK
Sentence length SD: 45.2164345295 60.3974514979 75% => OK
Chars per sentence: 104.470588235 118.986275619 88% => OK
Words per sentence: 21.0588235294 23.4991977007 90% => OK
Discourse Markers: 7.29411764706 5.21951772744 140% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.97078651685 101% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 7.80617977528 13% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 12.0 10.2758426966 117% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 2.0 5.13820224719 39% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 3.0 4.83258426966 62% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.218451041223 0.243740707755 90% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0716932083743 0.0831039109588 86% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0483626950457 0.0758088955206 64% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.130652618198 0.150359130593 87% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0450149688615 0.0667264976115 67% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 12.5 14.1392134831 88% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 58.62 48.8420337079 120% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.92365168539 111% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 10.3 12.1743820225 85% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.49 12.1639044944 94% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.9 8.38706741573 94% => OK
difficult_words: 73.0 100.480337079 73% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 8.5 11.8971910112 71% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.4 11.2143820225 93% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 11.7820224719 76% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 50.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 3.0 Out of 6
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