The graph below shows the number of library books read by boys and girls at Starmounth School from 2006 to the present.
Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
The graph shows us about number of boys and girls student in Starmount School who read library books. The trend have captured between 2009 and the present day.
In 2009, 60 boys and 30 girls already read library books. These trend increasing slightly in 2011 and reached the same numbers in 2011. However, each group take same rate of reading, the girls are sharply rise with 60 additional readers in a year. On the other hand boy readers rise with 20 new readers in the same term.
In the present day, number of school readers in each group is separately. The boys continuing climb up with 140 students. Contrary, girl readers fall down about 20 readers from the previous year.
To sum up, groups of student who read in library followed the same pattern from 2009 to 2011. Hence this pattern generally similar, numbers of reader are separately in the next years. Boy’s group has been an upward stable, while the girls has fluctuated condition.
The trend have captured
The trend has been captured
These trend increasing slightly
These trend is increasing slightly
Hence this pattern generally similar
Hence this pattern is generally similar
Sentence: However, each group take same rate of reading, the girls are sharply rise with 60 additional readers in a year.
Description: The fragment group take same is rare
Suggestion: Possible agreement error: Replace take with verb, present tense, 3rd person singular
Sentence: The boys continuing climb up with 140 students.
Description: A verb, present participle or gerund is not usually followed by a verb, base: uninflected present, imperative or infinitive
Suggestion: Refer to continuing and climb
flaws:
No. of Grammatical Errors: 5 2
Read a good grammar book.
Attribute Value Ideal
Score: 4.0 out of 9
Category: Poor Excellent
No. of Grammatical Errors: 5 2
No. of Spelling Errors: 0 2
No. of Sentences: 12 10
No. of Words: 165 200
No. of Characters: 757 1000
No. of Different Words: 94 100
Fourth Root of Number of Words: 3.584 4.0
Average Word Length: 4.588 4.6
Word Length SD: 2.132 2.4
No. of Words greater than 5 chars: 47 60
No. of Words greater than 6 chars: 39 50
No. of Words greater than 7 chars: 15 40
No. of Words greater than 8 chars: 9 20
Use of Passive Voice (%): 0 0
Avg. Sentence Length: 13.75 21.0
Sentence Length SD: 3.37 7.5
Use of Discourse Markers (%): 0.417 0.12
Sentence-Text Coherence: 0.372 0.35
Sentence-Para Coherence: 0.593 0.50
Sentence-Sentence Coherence: 0.067 0.07
Number of Paragraphs: 4 4