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Some people believe that visitors to other countries should follow local customs and behaviour. Others disagree and think that the host country should welcome cultural differences.
Discuss both these views and give your own opinion.
In the recent decades, high technology and growing economic have accelerated the transportation that we trail to different countries; in addition, acknowledge exchanging upgraded through no-frame internet. Therefore, it is easy to involve and fallow a unfamiliar culture while we traveling.
There are some people believe we should always respect various habitudes from different cultures. For this reason, the information investigated is helpful before we visit an unfamiliar place. After we understand the customs, we should follow their behaviour for not to offence, and notice them we are visitors.
In the one hand, people like to be peace, at this standard, the people form local should welcome their new friends, and learn different cultures. In the other hand, no one has a right to ask someone do the things they do not like; however, it is for avoiding misunderstanding and no offending, we all have a obligation to respect some else.
To sum up, in my aspect, respecting customs behaviour from different culture background is an important lesson that we all should take, although sometimes we might have to accept unwilling behaviours or customs during it, the process that changed because of learning respect will bring us a new sight.
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