Some parents think computer games are better for children and they should be allowed to play more of them. Whereas some parents argue that they are harmful to children.
Discuss both views and give your opinion.
The most strinking advantage is blessed by modern technology is computer. Today computer games become indispensable part of children lives, that offer them amusement and apptitudes so that some proportion of people assert that computer games are essential. By contrast others believed that these games have more cons than pros. Here,i adore to establish my view point regarding to this.
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In this rampant age of globalization technology has given a soaring hand to human beings. There are innumberable advantages of the computer games like first and formost, offsprings obtain more skills and attain diverse ways to solve the problems so that games make them enable for prompt calculations. Moreover, while playing the games, there is a lot of difficult challanges and tremendous endavours are faced by them to accross the level which esclates their will power and make them able to face the real life challanges.
Furthermore, "Every sword has two edges", it has a dark side too. Firstly games are time consuming and requires a lot of time consequently their study has being neglected by them. Secondly by playing these games more, has a bad effect also such as their behaviour become aggressive and stubbern.
In my opinion as we know that "All work and no play makes jack a dull boy". The children play more educational games rather than other games. They should be allow to play games also provided that, the parents must guide the positive aspects of games to them.
All in all, it is evident that they play games in limited time and in positive way otherwise it prove boon for the children, parents as well as society. They have to learn more about educational games in their schools for instance teachers should teach them about educational activities ,games as well in their free time.
Sentence: Today computer games become indispensable part of children lives, that offer them amusement and apptitudes so that some proportion of people assert that computer games are essential.
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Sentence: All in all, it is evident that they play games in limited time and in positive way otherwise it prove boon for the children, parents as well as society.
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Sentence: The most strinking advantage is blessed by modern technology is computer.
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Sentence: Today computer games become indispensable part of children lives, that offer them amusement and apptitudes so that some proportion of people assert that computer games are essential.
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Sentence: There are innumberable advantages of the computer games like first and formost, offsprings obtain more skills and attain diverse ways to solve the problems so that games make them enable for prompt calculations.
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Sentence: Moreover, while playing the games, there is a lot of difficult challanges and tremendous endavours are faced by them to accross the level which esclates their will power and make them able to face the real life challanges.
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Sentence: Secondly by playing these games more, has a bad effect also such as their behaviour become aggressive and stubbern.
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