Some people claim that there are more disadvantages of the car than it is advantages. Do you agree or disagree?
In this century, car becomes extra ordinary thing for human life. Large numbers of inhabitant feel incomplete without one kind of this vehicle. Several citizen hold that it could bring positive effect for owner and income to country. It seems to me to choice one of them. Below I would explain my reason to support my idea.
In the big city, society believes that the cause of pollution come from tools of land transportation which increases rapidly every year. Some organization try to decrease these pollution but their effort unbalance with number of vehicle because uncontrolled from government, as result traffic jam happen in every street. Moreover, various users could be lazy to do other exercises such as, walking and cycling. This condition could bring disease such as obesity.
On the other hand, these buses could make easier for men to move other places with their family or go to holiday and visit their relatives. This could make close their relationship each other. Moreover, economic condition in country could rise significantly because travel from many trucks. For instance, restaurants and street vendors would get large number of visitors who travel for long distance. In additional, automobile factory provide job for million society as a worker. From company, government get much income because every year, industry have to pay tax. Not only from this business but also from society who buy this vehicle.
In conclusion, a growth of kinds of car would stay in one line between advantages and disadvantages. Some citizen agree that pollution and traffic jam are effect from land transportation. In spite of that, other agree that car gives many advantages, not only for society and employers but also income to country. I believe that support vehicle company to produce with control from government for using these tools could be good for all.
Sentence: Several citizen hold that it could bring positive effect for owner and income to country.
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Sentence: Some organization try to decrease these pollution but their effort unbalance with number of vehicle because uncontrolled from government, as result traffic jam happen in every street.
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Sentence: In additional, automobile factory provide job for million society as a worker.
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Sentence: From company, government get much income because every year, industry have to pay tax.
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Sentence: Some citizen agree that pollution and traffic jam are effect from land transportation.
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