Some people think women should be allowed to join the army, the navy and the air force just like men. To what extent do you agree or disagree? Give reasons for your answer.Write at least 250 words.

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Some people think women should be allowed to join the army, the navy and the air force just like men.

To what extent do you agree or disagree? Give reasons for your answer.

Write at least 250 words.

Even though nowadays many countries allow women to be a part of national army, some people still argues that this job is not suitable for women because strength and bravery are not housewife characters. In my opinion, this view is wrong because of two reasons.

According to the first reason, uncountable historical events make us undeniable that women could perform significantly in serving as national guards. Not only play role as common soldiers, but also commanders. Catherine the Great of Russia in Medieval age for example. Thus, it is a myth to say that women not qualify enough to do men jobs.

For second reason, if it is right to say that women not have some abilities, we should accept conversely that men lack some abilities too. For example, men are strong in physical than women, but women have sense of care and gentle than men. So, women are more appropriate to running mission requiring communication skills like collecting data or making relation with local people. Thus, opening military jobs for women are the opportunities to increase military potential.

In conclusion, there is no valid argument to deny women joining army. It is not necessary to say that negative perspective on allowing women enter to military is not different from other negative views on other roles of women, it is rhetoric of masculine ideology which support gender inequity and want women not entitle other roles more than ‘mother’ and ‘wife’.

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Not only play role as common soldiers, but also commanders.
Description: not only ... but also ... is not used properly

to say that women not qualify enough to do men jobs.
to say that women are not qualify enough to do men's jobs.

men are strong in physical than women
men are physically stronger than women

women are more appropriate to running mission
women are more appropriate to run mission

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No. of Grammatical Errors: 4 2
No. of Words: 240 350

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Minimum 250 words wanted.

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Score: 5.5 out of 9
Category: Satisfactory Excellent
No. of Grammatical Errors: 4 2
No. of Spelling Errors: 0 2
No. of Sentences: 12 15
No. of Words: 240 350
No. of Characters: 1170 1500
No. of Different Words: 149 200
Fourth Root of Number of Words: 3.936 4.7
Average Word Length: 4.875 4.6
Word Length SD: 2.54 2.4
No. of Words greater than 5 chars: 80 100
No. of Words greater than 6 chars: 60 80
No. of Words greater than 7 chars: 44 40
No. of Words greater than 8 chars: 24 20
Use of Passive Voice (%): 0 0
Avg. Sentence Length: 20 21.0
Sentence Length SD: 11.083 7.5
Use of Discourse Markers (%): 0.917 0.12
Sentence-Text Coherence: 0.358 0.35
Sentence-Para Coherence: 0.581 0.50
Sentence-Sentence Coherence: 0.111 0.07
Number of Paragraphs: 4 5