task 1 The maps show changes that took place in Youngsville in New Zealand over a 25 year period from 1980 to 2005 What is the most noticeable difference between the two maps

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task 1: The maps show changes that took place in Youngsville in New Zealand over a 25 year period from 1980 to 2005. What is the most noticeable difference between the two maps?

The map show the developments which took place in the coastal town of Youngsville between 1980 and 2005.

In 1980, the town was a much greener residental area with a large number of trees and individual houses,but during the next 25 years the town experinced a number of dramatic changes. The most noticeable is that all of the trees south of the River Alanah were cut down, with all the houses along the railway line being knocked down and replaced by skyscrapers. Moreover, a new industrial estate with factories and warehouses sprang up around the airport and school.

Only a few trees north of the river remained.The woodland eas cleared to make way for a park, a golf course and car parking facilities. Further developments were the construction of a stadium near the north-east corner of the lake and a new stretch of railway from the river running directly north. A marina was also built at the mouth of the river.

Overall, a comparison of the two maps reveals a change from a largely rural to a mainly urban landscape.

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entence: The map show the developments which took place in the coastal town of Youngsville between 1980 and 2005.
Description: The fragment map show the is rare
Suggestion: Possible agreement error: Replace show with verb, past tense

Sentence: In 1980, the town was a much greener residental area with a large number of trees and individual houses,but during the next 25 years the town experinced a number of dramatic changes.
Error: residental Suggestion: No alternate word
Error: experinced Suggestion: experienced

Sentence: Only a few trees north of the river remained.The woodland eas cleared to make way for a park, a golf course and car parking facilities.
Error: eas Suggestion: No alternate word

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