Using a computer every day can have more negative than positive effects on your children.Do you agree or disagree?

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Using a computer every day can have more negative than positive effects on your children.

Do you agree or disagree?

Today, our life style has been changed. In fact new technologies such as computer and the Internet cause these changes. Nowadays, we use computer in every part our life every day every time. But using computer for a long time has some negative effects on us and also on our children.

In my opinion, using computer and the Internet more than three or four hours during a day is harmful for children. Firstly, looking at the monitor for a long time is harmful for their eyes because they do not blink so much. Consequently, their eyes are become red and tired. Secondly, in the past, our children had more physical activities such as played football and so on, but now they stay at home and work with computer.

In addition, today, we have a lot of different computer's games. These games are very popular between children and adult. But most of the time, these games are not good for children, their have a lot violence. Unfortunately, we have seen bad effects of these games on our children, some of them tend to shooting and kill people. Finally, there are much information in computers and the Internet. Some of this information like computer's games does not good for children.

To conclude, I agree with this idea that using of computer has bad effects. However, we cannot eliminate using of computer of our children life. We can just limited hours of using computer. We should encourage our children to do more outdoor activities like sports, go to the movies, chat with friends or even read a new book. All these activities have a lot of advantages for them.

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Suggestion: Nowadays, we use computer in every part of our life every day every time.

Some of this information like computer's games does not good for children.
Suggestion: Some of information like computer's games are not good for children.

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