the development of a fishing village to the hotel resort
Both maps display a village, before and after it was developed for tourism.
The village changed considerable over the time period. The fishing village was very small, has agricultural field and live stocks surrounded it, it near to the beach and a beach to the south-east of the village. Over the period, the town was completely transformed with the addition of new buildings, a golf course and the road.
The most noticeable additions are the new buildings – around the coastal line. Big corporate buildings have been built in the south part of the city and the golf courses have been constructed in the west-north of the town. A road has been developed, which were from the west side of the mountain toward to the building area on the south-east of the map passing the main residential area on the east-north.
The pier and the fishing boats of the villagers have been demolished. Instead, the beach remains the only natural feature to remain relatively untouched; it merely added the beach parasol on the sand.
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The fishing village was small
The fishing village was small and it was surrounded by agricultural field with live stock. On the south-east of the village, there was a beach.
The village changed considerable
The village changed considerably
The fishing village was very small, has agricultural field and live stocks surrounded it, it near to the beach and a beach to the south-east of the village.
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