The bar chart below shows the percentage of unemployed graduates aged 20 24 in one European country over a two year period

Essay topics:

The bar chart below shows the percentage of unemployed graduates, aged 20-24, in one European country over a two-year period.

The bar chart illustrates the unemployment rate among male and female graduates who were in the age range of 20 to 24 in Europe in the years 2008 and 2009.

Overall, it is apparent that male graduates had a higher unemployment rate than female graduates over the time frame and the highest figure was observed in the latter stage for both the sexes.

First and foremost, from January to April 2008, a decreasing trend was detected for both men and women. There was 10% of male graduates who were unemployed in January 2008 and dropped slightly to about 7.5% in April and remained constant until July 2008 compared to about 7.5% and just above 5% in January 2008 and April 2008 respectively for women. There were the same percentages of unemployment for both males and females in April and July 2008.

A sharp increase was seen for both males and females in October 2008 with figures just over 15% and 10% respectively. This was followed by an alleviating trend until July 2009. The male graduates’ unemployment rate moderately plunged in January 2009 and remained steady in the next period (approximately 12%) and reached just over 10% in July 2009. Similarly, the unemployed female graduate kept on decreasing till the penultimate period. Interestingly, however, A significant rise in the unemployment rate for both genders can be observed after July 2009 and eventually peaked at around 23% for men and just under 15% for females in October 2009.

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Average: 7.6 (17 votes)

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Grammar and spelling errors:
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Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
first, however, if, similarly

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 10.0 7.0 143% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 1.0 1.00243902439 100% => OK
Conjunction : 17.0 6.8 250% => Less conjunction wanted
Relative clauses : 3.0 3.15609756098 95% => OK
Pronoun: 3.0 5.60731707317 54% => OK
Preposition: 39.0 33.7804878049 115% => OK
Nominalization: 5.0 3.97073170732 126% => OK

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1216.0 965.302439024 126% => OK
No of words: 246.0 196.424390244 125% => OK
Chars per words: 4.94308943089 4.92477711251 100% => OK
Fourth root words length: 3.96035189615 3.73543355544 106% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.71725999562 2.65546596893 102% => OK
Unique words: 121.0 106.607317073 114% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.491869918699 0.547539520022 90% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 370.8 283.868780488 131% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.45097560976 103% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 2.0 1.53170731707 131% => OK
Article: 6.0 4.33902439024 138% => OK
Subordination: 0.0 1.07073170732 0% => More adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 0.0 0.482926829268 0% => OK
Preposition: 1.0 3.36585365854 30% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 10.0 8.94146341463 112% => OK
Sentence length: 24.0 22.4926829268 107% => OK
Sentence length SD: 57.0035963778 43.030603864 132% => OK
Chars per sentence: 121.6 112.824112599 108% => OK
Words per sentence: 24.6 22.9334400587 107% => OK
Discourse Markers: 2.9 5.23603664747 55% => More transition words/phrases wanted.
Paragraphs: 4.0 3.83414634146 104% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 1.69756097561 59% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 3.0 3.70975609756 81% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 4.0 1.13902439024 351% => Less negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 3.0 4.09268292683 73% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.158067297873 0.215688989381 73% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.082438345981 0.103423049105 80% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0837201382448 0.0843802449381 99% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.135325101542 0.15604864568 87% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0917448313612 0.0819641961636 112% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 14.1 13.2329268293 107% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 55.58 61.2550243902 91% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.51609756098 135% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.5 10.3012195122 112% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.67 11.4140731707 102% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.91 8.06136585366 98% => OK
difficult_words: 48.0 40.7170731707 118% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 13.5 11.4329268293 118% => OK
gunning_fog: 11.6 10.9970731707 105% => OK
text_standard: 12.0 11.0658536585 108% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Rates: 67.4157303371 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 6.0 Out of 9
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