The following graph shows the number of people (by age) attending the cinema more than once a month.Write a report for a university lecturer describing the information below.Write at least 150 words.

The line graph illustrates the values of the population according to their age that were used to visit the theaters as often as they wanted in a one month period. It can be clearly seen that 15-24 years old represents the highest cinema goers among the four age groups.

Let us take a closer look at 15-24 years old movie goers, in 1984 to 1991, there was a steady increase from 15% to 33% approximately. During the same period the age group of 7-14 years old was fluctuating gradually from 10% to 14% respectively. It was followed by 23-34 age groups which were rising constantly and it ranges from 5 to 13%, at the same time reaches the same level of 7-14 years old age group. The last group from 35 years old and over was slowly climbing from 2% to 3%.

From 1992 to 1998, most of the age groups were fluctuating, while the first group reached the pinnacle of 58% in 1999, before it slumped abruptly to 50% in year 2002. It shows no trend in year 2003. However, the ages 7-14 and 23-34 years old group still keep on fluctuating immensely, the first group landed at 38% while the latter group got 35% in the year 2003.

Overall, the 35 years old and over remained the lowest as theater goers, which it only achieved 19% in 2003.

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The line graph illustrates the values of the population according to their age that were used to visit the theaters as often as they wanted in a one month period.
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