The graph below shows the demand for electricity in England during typical days in winter and summer. The pie chart show how electricity is used in an average English home.( IELTS Book 4 test 2)
The line graph reveals the total consumption of electricity units in 24 hours in English house’s during winter and summer. Likewise, the pie chart demonstrates the four distinct ways of utilizing the current in an average English resident. Overall, the both data depict majority of people use electricity in cold weather (winter).
Initially, evidently, fluctuating statistics represent the daily avail of power in England home's are giant in winter season. Therefore, mostly people consume light between 9 pm till 5 am which is drastically increase by 45,000 units simultaneously, the downward trend after 3am to 9am reveals the demand of electricity in Britain houses are swiftly plunge by 30,000 units in winter time.. In contrast, the summer pattern describes a significant diverse erratic trend of the electric between 9 am to 3pm. or 9 pm till midnight. Additional, in afternoon’s English people consume more power 20,000 units. However, after the mid-day data shows a considerable fluctuating trend constantly.
Secondly, the pie chart reckons the percentage of the electricity is using in English dwelling which is intense and large amount of people use 52.5% electric power on heating rooms or water. Whereas, the ratio of kitchen product, entertainment and lighting are also steady with 15% comprehensively. Meantime, 17.5% of electricity are using on ovens , kettles or washing machines.
In short, the two different graphs proportion delineates winter is the most optimal period to expend electricity power in England territory.
in English house’s during winter and summer.
in English houses during winter and summer.
fluctuating statistics represent the daily avail of power in England home's are giant in winter season.
fluctuating statistics that represent the daily avail of power in England homes are giant in winter season.
which is drastically increase by 45,000 units
which is drastically increased by 45,000 units
in afternoon’s English people consume more power
in the afternoon, English people consume more power
the pie chart reckons the percentage of the electricity is using in English dwelling which is intense and large amount of people use 52.5% electric power on heating rooms or water.
the pie chart reckons that the percentage of the electricity is using in English dwelling which is intense, and large amount of people use 52.5% electric power on heating rooms or water.
the two different graphs proportion delineates winter is the most optimal period to expend electricity power in England territory.
the two different graphs proportion which delineates winter is the most optimal period to expend electricity power in England territory.
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