The table below shows the worldwide market share of the notebook computer market for manufacturers in the years 2006 and 2007.

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The table below shows the worldwide market share of the notebook computer market for manufacturers in the years 2006 and 2007.

The table elucidates the changes of the market shares of notebook computer manufacturers for two consecutive years, 2006 and 2007.

It is apparent that, HP distinctively was the market leader in computer manufacturing, which is recorded at 31.4% of notebooks sold and slightly more sales (of 34%) in 2007. The least market share is Fujitsu –Siemens for the both years.

Dell, Acer and others are followed closely with selling of notebook computers. However, Dell increased its market share from 16.6% to 10.7% for 2006 and 2007, respectively. In contrast, Acer and Others showed a decline trend as Acer saw a slight drop of its share of the market from 11.6% to 10.7% whereas the market share of notebooks in others fell by 3.5% to reach at 19.3% - this figure is lower than the share of Dell in 2007.

The other computer manufacturing brands consist of smallest share of the worldwide market. Toshiba increased by 1.1% while the rest of computer logos (Lenovo, Fujitsu) showed a decline trend from 6.6% to 6.2% for the former and 4.8% to 2.3% for the latter in 2007.

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from 16.6% to 10.7%
from 16.6% to 20.2%

flaws:
forget about 'Others'.

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