The bar chart below shows the percentage of Australian men and women in different age groups who did regular physical activity in 2010

Essay topics:

The bar chart below shows the percentage of Australian men and women in different age groups who did regular physical activity in 2010.

The bar chart illustrates how both sexes people in Australia for 6 kinds of different age groups did usual sports activity in 2010.

Overall, it is clearly seen that female in 45 to 54 have a significant
percentage throughout the survey period, while the figure for 35 to 44 male group was the lowest proportion in whole sex.

When it comes to 15 to 24, the percentage of male accounted for over a half which was the highest in the entire men category. Moreover, there was a downward trend from 15-24 to 35-44 whereas upward trend in women category. 48.9 and 52.5 percent of women doing exercise was in 25-34 and 35-44 age group respectively.

Looking at the 45-54 factor in detail, women's percentage peaked compared with other age groups, experienced by 53.3 percent. On the other hand, males who engaged in physical exercises were represented a steady increase, by 43.1, 45.1 and 46.7 percent. It is interesting that the ratio of male and female who are 65 years old and over was nearly the same with 46.7 and 47.1 respectively.

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Average: 4.6 (3 votes)

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Transition Words or Phrases used:
if, look, moreover, whereas, while, on the other hand

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 9.0 7.0 129% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 0.0 1.00243902439 0% => OK
Conjunction : 6.0 6.8 88% => OK
Relative clauses : 6.0 3.15609756098 190% => OK
Pronoun: 5.0 5.60731707317 89% => OK
Preposition: 28.0 33.7804878049 83% => OK
Nominalization: 1.0 3.97073170732 25% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 865.0 965.302439024 90% => OK
No of words: 181.0 196.424390244 92% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.77900552486 4.92477711251 97% => OK
Fourth root words length: 3.66791821706 3.73543355544 98% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.59133102666 2.65546596893 98% => OK
Unique words: 118.0 106.607317073 111% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.651933701657 0.547539520022 119% => OK
syllable_count: 250.2 283.868780488 88% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.4 1.45097560976 96% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 2.0 1.53170731707 131% => OK
Article: 2.0 4.33902439024 46% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 1.07073170732 187% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 0.482926829268 0% => OK
Preposition: 2.0 3.36585365854 59% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 8.0 8.94146341463 89% => OK
Sentence length: 22.0 22.4926829268 98% => OK
Sentence length SD: 28.7616824091 43.030603864 67% => OK
Chars per sentence: 108.125 112.824112599 96% => OK
Words per sentence: 22.625 22.9334400587 99% => OK
Discourse Markers: 6.625 5.23603664747 127% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 3.83414634146 130% => Less paragraphs wanted.
Language errors: 2.0 1.69756097561 118% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 4.0 3.70975609756 108% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 0.0 1.13902439024 0% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 4.0 4.09268292683 98% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.228613203066 0.215688989381 106% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0943559702094 0.103423049105 91% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0816248492174 0.0843802449381 97% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.114361212198 0.15604864568 73% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0998400059588 0.0819641961636 122% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 12.4 13.2329268293 94% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 66.07 61.2550243902 108% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.51609756098 135% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.5 10.3012195122 92% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 10.74 11.4140731707 94% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.39 8.06136585366 104% => OK
difficult_words: 42.0 40.7170731707 103% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 14.0 11.4329268293 122% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.8 10.9970731707 98% => OK
text_standard: 11.0 11.0658536585 99% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Maximum four paragraphs wanted.

Rates: 78.6516853933 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 7.0 Out of 9
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