The bar chart below shows the percentage participation of men in senior development in three companies between 1980 and the year 2010.Summarise the information by selecting and report in the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

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The bar chart below shows the percentage participation of men in senior development in three companies between 1980 and the year 2010.

Summarise the information by selecting and report in the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The bar chart shows the percentage of men in senior development position in three companies from 1980 to 2010.

While more men were in senior positions at Apple than other two companies in 1980 at 15%, the trend was fairly erratic with a 2% drop to 13% in 1985, followed by a rise of 1% five years later. In 1995, men held 7% more top development jobs than in 1990. after a slight drop back to 19% in 2000, by 2010 25% of top posts were filled by men.

By contrast, at ibm men fared much better. In 1980, 2% of senior posts were occupied by men with no change five years on. By 1990, the figure had increased to 13%, doubling to 26 per cent in 1995. five years afterwards, there was a 6% increase in male senior development jobs with a near twofold jump in 2010 to stand at 63%, the highest for the three companies.

The situation was less remarkable at Microsoft than the other two firms except for the year 2010. In 1980, the percentage of senior posts held by men was 8% climbing at the rate of 2% in each subsequent period until 2000, after which it leapt to 45%. From the data, it is clear that men dominated senior posts at ibm by 2010.

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Grammar and spelling errors:
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Suggestion: After
...more top development jobs than in 1990. after a slight drop back to 19% in 2000, by 2...
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Message: This sentence does not start with an uppercase letter
Suggestion: Five
...o 13%, doubling to 26 per cent in 1995. five years afterwards, there was a 6% increa...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
so, while, except for

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 8.0 7.0 114% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 0.0 1.00243902439 0% => OK
Conjunction : 0.0 6.8 0% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 2.0 3.15609756098 63% => OK
Pronoun: 3.0 5.60731707317 54% => OK
Preposition: 53.0 33.7804878049 157% => OK
Nominalization: 5.0 3.97073170732 126% => OK

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 932.0 965.302439024 97% => OK
No of words: 220.0 196.424390244 112% => OK
Chars per words: 4.23636363636 4.92477711251 86% => OK
Fourth root words length: 3.85128510684 3.73543355544 103% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.23070236873 2.65546596893 84% => OK
Unique words: 116.0 106.607317073 109% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.527272727273 0.547539520022 96% => OK
syllable_count: 251.1 283.868780488 88% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.1 1.45097560976 76% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 1.0 1.53170731707 65% => OK
Article: 6.0 4.33902439024 138% => OK
Subordination: 3.0 1.07073170732 280% => Less adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 0.0 0.482926829268 0% => OK
Preposition: 10.0 3.36585365854 297% => Less preposition wanted as sentence beginnings.

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 11.0 8.94146341463 123% => OK
Sentence length: 20.0 22.4926829268 89% => OK
Sentence length SD: 45.1769706564 43.030603864 105% => OK
Chars per sentence: 84.7272727273 112.824112599 75% => OK
Words per sentence: 20.0 22.9334400587 87% => OK
Discourse Markers: 1.90909090909 5.23603664747 36% => More transition words/phrases wanted.
Paragraphs: 4.0 3.83414634146 104% => OK
Language errors: 2.0 1.69756097561 118% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 6.0 3.70975609756 162% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 3.0 1.13902439024 263% => Less negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 2.0 4.09268292683 49% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.247863289631 0.215688989381 115% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.114174311863 0.103423049105 110% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.114876482821 0.0843802449381 136% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.216104624908 0.15604864568 138% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.139583505567 0.0819641961636 170% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 8.5 13.2329268293 64% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 93.48 61.2550243902 153% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.51609756098 48% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 5.2 10.3012195122 50% => Flesch kincaid grade is low.
coleman_liau_index: 7.31 11.4140731707 64% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 6.93 8.06136585366 86% => OK
difficult_words: 32.0 40.7170731707 79% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 7.5 11.4329268293 66% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.0 10.9970731707 91% => OK
text_standard: 8.0 11.0658536585 72% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Rates: 73.0337078652 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 6.5 Out of 9
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