Bar chart : the percentage of boys, girls and all for chatting on the internet and playing on games console.

Essay topics:

Bar chart : the percentage of boys, girls and all for chatting on the internet and playing on games console.

The figure elucidates the percentage of males, females and both genders in two different aspects. At first glance, it is evident that the boys are dominant in playing on games’ console where the girls are dominant in chatting on the internet.

To begin with the boys, the number of men who played this game is higher rather than women and both genders and it approximately achieved to well beneath 9 in 10. Nevertheless, the males’ percentages for chatting on the internet has become the lowest groups in which it merely has just above a half.

In contrast, females have a different pattern with males in which it becomes the highest group for chatting on the internet, which made up at just under seven-tenths, and it also be the lowest group for playing on games’ console, which constituted at just over five-tenths. In accordance with both gender percentages, it became the second rank in these two different aspects where it has around 60 to 62 per cent for chatting on the internet and about well beyond three-fifths for playing games.

Votes
Average: 7.8 (1 vote)

Comments

Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 5, column 180, Rule ID: IT_VBZ[1]
Message: Did you mean 'is'?
Suggestion: is
...at just under seven-tenths, and it also be the lowest group for playing on games&a...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, first, if, nevertheless, second, so, well, in contrast, to begin with

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 5.0 7.0 71% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 0.0 1.00243902439 0% => OK
Conjunction : 5.0 6.8 74% => OK
Relative clauses : 8.0 3.15609756098 253% => Less relative clauses wanted (maybe 'which' is over used).
Pronoun: 10.0 5.60731707317 178% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 34.0 33.7804878049 101% => OK
Nominalization: 1.0 3.97073170732 25% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 883.0 965.302439024 91% => OK
No of words: 179.0 196.424390244 91% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.93296089385 4.92477711251 100% => OK
Fourth root words length: 3.65774358864 3.73543355544 98% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.79840872893 2.65546596893 105% => OK
Unique words: 102.0 106.607317073 96% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.569832402235 0.547539520022 104% => OK
syllable_count: 266.4 283.868780488 94% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.45097560976 103% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 2.0 1.53170731707 131% => OK
Article: 3.0 4.33902439024 69% => OK
Subordination: 0.0 1.07073170732 0% => More adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 1.0 0.482926829268 207% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 4.0 3.36585365854 119% => OK

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 6.0 8.94146341463 67% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 29.0 22.4926829268 129% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 58.8916141927 43.030603864 137% => OK
Chars per sentence: 147.166666667 112.824112599 130% => OK
Words per sentence: 29.8333333333 22.9334400587 130% => OK
Discourse Markers: 12.5 5.23603664747 239% => Less transition words/phrases wanted.
Paragraphs: 3.0 3.83414634146 78% => More paragraphs wanted.
Language errors: 1.0 1.69756097561 59% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 3.0 3.70975609756 81% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 2.0 1.13902439024 176% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 1.0 4.09268292683 24% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.306904496356 0.215688989381 142% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.144881862486 0.103423049105 140% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0534580068812 0.0843802449381 63% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.212377689082 0.15604864568 136% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.00445913426458 0.0819641961636 5% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 16.7 13.2329268293 126% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 50.5 61.2550243902 82% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.51609756098 135% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 13.4 10.3012195122 130% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.91 11.4140731707 104% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.34 8.06136585366 103% => OK
difficult_words: 37.0 40.7170731707 91% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 11.0 11.4329268293 96% => OK
gunning_fog: 13.6 10.9970731707 124% => OK
text_standard: 14.0 11.0658536585 127% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Rates: 78.6516853933 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 7.0 Out of 9
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