The bar graph below depicts information about the average hours of unpaidwork* per week done by people in different categories.

Essay topics:

The bar graph below depicts information about the average hours of unpaid
work* per week done by people in different categories.

The information about married men and women spending hours on unpaid work per week, according to numbers of children is depicted by the graph.
Overall, it is immediately apparent that women are relatively superior on spending hours over men for doing unpaid work activities.
Regarding men activities, Both men with no children and men two children, we can see, there are similar hours for doing such unpaid activities, with around 19 and 18 hours each. Meanwhile, only 17 hours, the unpaid work is done by men who have over than three children, a much lower than other men categories.
Moving to married women activities, most hours have spent by women with more than three children to do unpaid works, accounting for approximately 58 hours. It is, then, followed by women with a maximum two children, noted at 51 hours, which is the second highest of the figure shown. Finally, we see that only 30 hours, women with no children spending on unpaid activities.

Votes
Average: 7.3 (1 vote)

Comments

Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 3, column 188, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
... around 19 and 18 hours each. Meanwhile, only 17 hours, the unpaid work is done b...
^^^

Transition Words or Phrases used:
finally, regarding, second, then, while

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 7.0 7.0 100% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 1.0 1.00243902439 100% => OK
Conjunction : 3.0 6.8 44% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 4.0 3.15609756098 127% => OK
Pronoun: 6.0 5.60731707317 107% => OK
Preposition: 23.0 33.7804878049 68% => OK
Nominalization: 1.0 3.97073170732 25% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 808.0 965.302439024 84% => OK
No of words: 163.0 196.424390244 83% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.95705521472 4.92477711251 101% => OK
Fourth root words length: 3.57311423478 3.73543355544 96% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.59634627191 2.65546596893 98% => OK
Unique words: 91.0 106.607317073 85% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.558282208589 0.547539520022 102% => OK
syllable_count: 234.9 283.868780488 83% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.4 1.45097560976 96% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 4.0 1.53170731707 261% => Less pronouns wanted as sentence beginning.
Article: 3.0 4.33902439024 69% => OK
Subordination: 0.0 1.07073170732 0% => More adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 0.0 0.482926829268 0% => OK
Preposition: 3.0 3.36585365854 89% => OK

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 7.0 8.94146341463 78% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 23.0 22.4926829268 102% => OK
Sentence length SD: 25.0753965114 43.030603864 58% => The essay contains lots of sentences with the similar length. More sentence varieties wanted.
Chars per sentence: 115.428571429 112.824112599 102% => OK
Words per sentence: 23.2857142857 22.9334400587 102% => OK
Discourse Markers: 5.57142857143 5.23603664747 106% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 3.83414634146 104% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 1.69756097561 59% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 1.0 3.70975609756 27% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 3.0 1.13902439024 263% => Less negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 3.0 4.09268292683 73% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.104225149629 0.215688989381 48% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0651060051158 0.103423049105 63% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0956279364148 0.0843802449381 113% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.101331161979 0.15604864568 65% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.112768892493 0.0819641961636 138% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 13.6 13.2329268293 103% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 65.05 61.2550243902 106% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.51609756098 135% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.9 10.3012195122 96% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.78 11.4140731707 103% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.39 8.06136585366 92% => OK
difficult_words: 27.0 40.7170731707 66% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 14.5 11.4329268293 127% => OK
gunning_fog: 11.2 10.9970731707 102% => OK
text_standard: 12.0 11.0658536585 108% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Rates: 73.0337078652 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 6.5 Out of 9
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