The bar graph below represents the data about the clubs joined by the people of two different age groups at a leisure center Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant

Essay topics:

The bar graph below represents the data about the clubs joined by the people of two different age groups at a leisure center.
Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The bar graph illustrates, the information of people preference in leisure clubs namely gardening, photography, fitness, arts and crafts, music/ dance and cycling by two age groups. Age categories are 25-35 and 55-65.

Overall, it has been clear from the graph that, the people with the age of 25-35 was the overwhelming majority to interested in club activities. Cycling was the most preferred leisure activities of this age group, while, this was the least priority of elders. People with age above 55 was interested in gardening among the other activities.

As is observed in the age of 55-65, the total number of people who is interested in gardening was more than double of 25-35 which is about 25 and 55 members respectively. Whereas, in cycling the trend was highest in the age group of 25-35 such as, approximately 65 people, in turn, only 10 members accounted for cycling by the years of 55-65. Moreover, arts and grafts was the next important leisure club activities among 25-35 which is around 60 members. While, only 20 members seems to be attend for this activities among young people.

People who joined in club for fitness, music and dance activities was almost same in both age groups such as, more than 50 members from 25-35 and 50 members from the group of 55-65 years old. Furthermore, photography consists of relatively similar number of members with about 45 members.

Votes
Average: 8.2 (15 votes)

Comments

Grammar and spelling errors:
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Suggestion:
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... only 20 members seems to be attend for this activities among young people. Peopl...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
furthermore, moreover, whereas, while, such as

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 15.0 7.0 214% => Less to be verbs wanted.
Auxiliary verbs: 0.0 1.00243902439 0% => OK
Conjunction : 7.0 6.8 103% => OK
Relative clauses : 5.0 3.15609756098 158% => OK
Pronoun: 5.0 5.60731707317 89% => OK
Preposition: 39.0 33.7804878049 115% => OK
Nominalization: 2.0 3.97073170732 50% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1164.0 965.302439024 121% => OK
No of words: 234.0 196.424390244 119% => OK
Chars per words: 4.97435897436 4.92477711251 101% => OK
Fourth root words length: 3.91114542567 3.73543355544 105% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.65108862063 2.65546596893 100% => OK
Unique words: 116.0 106.607317073 109% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.495726495726 0.547539520022 91% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 334.8 283.868780488 118% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.4 1.45097560976 96% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 2.0 1.53170731707 131% => OK
Article: 4.0 4.33902439024 92% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 1.07073170732 93% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 0.482926829268 0% => OK
Preposition: 2.0 3.36585365854 59% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 11.0 8.94146341463 123% => OK
Sentence length: 21.0 22.4926829268 93% => OK
Sentence length SD: 47.9364248401 43.030603864 111% => OK
Chars per sentence: 105.818181818 112.824112599 94% => OK
Words per sentence: 21.2727272727 22.9334400587 93% => OK
Discourse Markers: 4.18181818182 5.23603664747 80% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 3.83414634146 104% => OK
Language errors: 2.0 1.69756097561 118% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 7.0 3.70975609756 189% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 0.0 1.13902439024 0% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 4.0 4.09268292683 98% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.154445662261 0.215688989381 72% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0718361662566 0.103423049105 69% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0540589129615 0.0843802449381 64% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.123291875986 0.15604864568 79% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0508103871121 0.0819641961636 62% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 12.6 13.2329268293 95% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 67.08 61.2550243902 110% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.51609756098 135% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.1 10.3012195122 88% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.55 11.4140731707 101% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.51 8.06136585366 93% => OK
difficult_words: 42.0 40.7170731707 103% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 9.0 11.4329268293 79% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.4 10.9970731707 95% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 11.0658536585 81% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Rates: 56.1797752809 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 5.0 Out of 9
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