THE BAR GRAPH BELOW SHOWS THE NUMBER OG TOURISTS THAT TRAVELED TO SYDNEY AUSTRALIA IN THE FOUR YEAR PERIOD FROM 1997 TO 2000 THE OLYMPICS GAMES WERE HELD IN SYDNEY IN SEPTEMBER 2000

Essay topics:

THE BAR GRAPH BELOW SHOWS THE NUMBER OG TOURISTS THAT TRAVELED TO SYDNEY, AUSTRALIA IN THE FOUR-YEAR PERIOD FROM 1997 TO 2000. THE OLYMPICS GAMES WERE HELD IN SYDNEY IN SEPTEMBER 2000.

The graph gives data about how many international visitors who came to Sydney, Australia between from 1997 to 2000.
In general, there was an increase in a large number of Korean and Japanese visited Sydney whereas these other figures fall down over the 4 years.
During the period from 1997 to 2000, there was a significant increase in the number of travellers from Japan, from about 680,000 to 780,000. At this point, the figure stood at the top in the number of visitors came from Sydney, Australia. Meanwhile, this was a slight decrease in New Zealand tourist numbers, from around 650,000 to 610,000.
As for the number of visitors came from Korea over the 3 years, remaining stable before it went up considerably, approximately 250,000 in 2000. On the other hand, the number of tourists came from cities including the United Kingdom, the United States and Singapore stayed the same their level before falling down over the 4 years.
In conclusion, it could be seen from the graph there was a steady rise in the huge number of international visitors came to Sydney, Australia where took place The Olympic Games in September 2000

Votes
Average: 4.7 (2 votes)

Comments

Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 2, column 38, Rule ID: LARGE_NUMBER_OF[1]
Message: Specify a number, remove phrase, or simply use 'many' or 'numerous'
Suggestion: many; numerous
.... In general, there was an increase in a large number of Korean and Japanese visited Sydney wher...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
if, whereas, while, as for, in conclusion, in general, on the other hand

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 5.0 7.0 71% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 1.0 1.00243902439 100% => OK
Conjunction : 2.0 6.8 29% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 2.0 3.15609756098 63% => OK
Pronoun: 6.0 5.60731707317 107% => OK
Preposition: 46.0 33.7804878049 136% => OK
Nominalization: 0.0 3.97073170732 0% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 946.0 965.302439024 98% => OK
No of words: 193.0 196.424390244 98% => OK
Chars per words: 4.90155440415 4.92477711251 100% => OK
Fourth root words length: 3.72725689877 3.73543355544 100% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.52925114053 2.65546596893 95% => OK
Unique words: 109.0 106.607317073 102% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.564766839378 0.547539520022 103% => OK
syllable_count: 279.0 283.868780488 98% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.4 1.45097560976 96% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 2.0 1.53170731707 131% => OK
Article: 4.0 4.33902439024 92% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 1.07073170732 93% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 0.482926829268 0% => OK
Preposition: 7.0 3.36585365854 208% => Less preposition wanted as sentence beginnings.

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 8.0 8.94146341463 89% => OK
Sentence length: 24.0 22.4926829268 107% => OK
Sentence length SD: 33.6542623601 43.030603864 78% => OK
Chars per sentence: 118.25 112.824112599 105% => OK
Words per sentence: 24.125 22.9334400587 105% => OK
Discourse Markers: 9.0 5.23603664747 172% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 3.83414634146 130% => Less paragraphs wanted.
Language errors: 1.0 1.69756097561 59% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 6.0 3.70975609756 162% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 0.0 1.13902439024 0% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 2.0 4.09268292683 49% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.317288625359 0.215688989381 147% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.148678478474 0.103423049105 144% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0863001560326 0.0843802449381 102% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.187304083702 0.15604864568 120% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.08372553093 0.0819641961636 102% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 13.7 13.2329268293 104% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 64.04 61.2550243902 105% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.51609756098 48% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 10.3 10.3012195122 100% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.44 11.4140731707 100% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.02 8.06136585366 99% => OK
difficult_words: 39.0 40.7170731707 96% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 10.5 11.4329268293 92% => OK
gunning_fog: 11.6 10.9970731707 105% => OK
text_standard: 11.0 11.0658536585 99% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Maximum four paragraphs wanted.

Rates: 84.2696629213 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 7.5 Out of 9
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