The bar graph gives us the information about the life expectancy in Japan United states Korea and Indonesia and the table shows us the life expectancy between 1953 and 2008 summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make co

Essay topics:

The bar graph gives us the information about the life expectancy in Japan ,United states ,Korea and Indonesia and the table shows us the life expectancy between 1953 and 2008 .summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparison where relevant.

The given bar chart illustrates the information about the life expectancy in different four countries .The tabular chart compares the information about change in the life expectancy in 1953 and 2008.

It is crystal clear that , the highest life expectancy in Japan at more than 80 followed by Korea at less than 80 in 2008. The lowest life expectancy in Indonesia in 2008 . It was negeligible in 2008 the life expectancy of USA was 76 years.

Probing further ,maximum life expectancy was Indonesia Which grew by 15.7 years .An increase can be seen in Korea life expectancy at 12.5 years .There was a growth in Japan and United states of 3.5 and 3 respectively. Which was minimum than other countries.

Overall, the life expectancy in Japan was the highest i 1953 and 2008, Whereas, Indonesia had a lowest life expectancy in both 1953 and 2008 even though the escalation was the highest,

Votes
Average: 8.1 (2 votes)

Comments

Grammar and spelling errors:
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
if, whereas

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 9.0 7.0 129% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 1.0 1.00243902439 100% => OK
Conjunction : 5.0 6.8 74% => OK
Relative clauses : 3.0 3.15609756098 95% => OK
Pronoun: 4.0 5.60731707317 71% => OK
Preposition: 21.0 33.7804878049 62% => OK
Nominalization: 3.0 3.97073170732 76% => OK

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 742.0 965.302439024 77% => OK
No of words: 152.0 196.424390244 77% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.88157894737 4.92477711251 99% => OK
Fourth root words length: 3.51124308557 3.73543355544 94% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.71074148768 2.65546596893 102% => OK
Unique words: 80.0 106.607317073 75% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.526315789474 0.547539520022 96% => OK
syllable_count: 220.5 283.868780488 78% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.45097560976 103% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 2.0 1.53170731707 131% => OK
Article: 6.0 4.33902439024 138% => OK
Subordination: 0.0 1.07073170732 0% => More adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 0.0 0.482926829268 0% => OK
Preposition: 0.0 3.36585365854 0% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 7.0 8.94146341463 78% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 21.0 22.4926829268 93% => OK
Sentence length SD: 69.8464788822 43.030603864 162% => OK
Chars per sentence: 106.0 112.824112599 94% => OK
Words per sentence: 21.7142857143 22.9334400587 95% => OK
Discourse Markers: 1.57142857143 5.23603664747 30% => More transition words/phrases wanted.
Paragraphs: 4.0 3.83414634146 104% => OK
Language errors: 12.0 1.69756097561 707% => Less language errors wanted.
Sentences with positive sentiment : 2.0 3.70975609756 54% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 2.0 1.13902439024 176% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 3.0 4.09268292683 73% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.38485777277 0.215688989381 178% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.202703838251 0.103423049105 196% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.108776664132 0.0843802449381 129% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.260129517737 0.15604864568 167% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0552333033859 0.0819641961636 67% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 12.4 13.2329268293 94% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 58.62 61.2550243902 96% => OK
smog_index: 11.2 6.51609756098 172% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 10.3 10.3012195122 100% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.02 11.4140731707 97% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.38 8.06136585366 92% => OK
difficult_words: 26.0 40.7170731707 64% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 12.5 11.4329268293 109% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.4 10.9970731707 95% => OK
text_standard: 11.0 11.0658536585 99% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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More content wanted.

Rates: 61.797752809 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 5.5 Out of 9
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